Wednesday, 2 April 2008

parallel plot

yellowed paper fell from my journal
my eyes scanned through the mysterious markings
did astronomy play a part?
was it about a parallel world
faded out of vision by the familiar one?
writings on the wall had not warned me
I kept speculating about its origin
how did it come about in my pocket book
almost brittle piece of paper with frayed edges
stars and squiggles with lines and curves

"give me that paper, it is mine"
my five-years old niece came to me with a bounce
almost snatching it from my hand!
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27 comments:

  1. Brian2 April 2008 at 07:01

    Made me smile. The vehemence of innocence.

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  2. anthonynorth2 April 2008 at 07:40

    A mystery soon solved :-)

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  3. lissa2 April 2008 at 10:08

    You always surprise me with your endings, great one

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  4. Billy2 April 2008 at 10:59

    Loved the mystery of the first part, with a great smile to round out the piece :)

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  5. tumblewords2 April 2008 at 11:18

    So readily explained! Neat writing!

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  6. pia2 April 2008 at 12:49

    Love the deep thoughts followed by the five year old

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  7. pjd2 April 2008 at 12:52

    Happens every day around here!

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  8. Jo Anne O.2 April 2008 at 13:38

    Love it! Just before the last sentance I had thought it was placed there by yourself who was from another dimension! Great ending!

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  9. Lucy2 April 2008 at 14:29

    mysterious markings in... crayon! Very cute Gautami!

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  10. gingatao2 April 2008 at 15:03

    Cool, great ending, collapsing the mysteries of the universe into the enthusiasm of a child, lovely,

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  11. Linda Jacobs2 April 2008 at 15:26

    Great style here! I could picture that paper and the drawing on it! love your little niece!

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  12. Tammy2 April 2008 at 18:16

    LOL You always catch me with your endings. ;) Delightful Tami!

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  13. Noah the Great2 April 2008 at 18:32

    Hahaha. :D

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  14. paisley2 April 2008 at 19:28

    things that make you go...hmmmmm.....

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  15. Jujee2 April 2008 at 20:02

    Nice lead up to cheery ending

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  16. Whitesnake2 April 2008 at 20:51

    who knows where the cold wind blows?

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  17. Am In Trance2 April 2008 at 22:26

    Aww.. Thats So Cute..!!

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  18. TC3 April 2008 at 07:14

    This was so cute Gautami :)

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  19. ozymandiaz3 April 2008 at 07:32

    another mystery of the universe explained

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  20. christine3 April 2008 at 09:13

    That made me smile at the end. What a bossy young thing! and the imagination of a writer, getting lost in her fancies, until...poof! fun read, gautami.

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  21. One More Believer3 April 2008 at 12:53

    that was very funny!!!...

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  22. Amarettogirl3 April 2008 at 15:24

    How clever, fun, witty and playful this read was! Loved it! thanks!

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  23. Laane4 April 2008 at 02:34

    wonderful!
    Aren't kids fun. LOL!

    Whenever you want to visit my entry
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    Enjoy your day!

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  24. Marcia (MeeAugraphie)4 April 2008 at 11:19

    I was so convinced you had written it and forgotten it... until she bounced in. Much fun!

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  25. watermaid4 April 2008 at 11:25

    I always like a surprise ending.

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  26. polona5 April 2008 at 10:13

    you are certainly a master of punch line.
    great stuff as always

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  27. WriterKat6 April 2008 at 16:59

    Kids definitely live in a parallel, almost alien universe. Great twist on the plot.

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