Sunday 24 July 2011

loads

corner inspects my departure,
shift in an aperture
my shadow wraps a scarf
I shiver in the cold
I watch a boy pick a nickle
Only then I start counting galaxies

16 comments:

  1. the things you see through the camera of life - beautiful

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  2. infinite possibilities in infinite realities...or maybe galaxies...smiles.

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  3. So many times we are too busy to really see through the lens. Thanks for being a part of the Sunday 160.

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  4. cute, one can never under estimate one's potentials.
    cheers.

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  5. The lens often narrows the focus and the intensity brings brilliance.

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  6. I like this. A srprise at the end, when the boy picks the nickle. Nicely done.

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  7. I like this. A srprise at the end, when the boy picks the nickle. Nicely done.

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  8. Maybe everyone should count galaxies more often. But we also need to see the details.

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  9. You took me far out there with this one.

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  10. ahhh...life in six sentences-
    brava!

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  11. Wow. The last line is very poignant.
    You're such a talent!
    xoRobyn

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  12. reminds me of a rubic's cube...
    and I guess that is what life is
    sometimes.

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  13. Hello Gautami:

    I'm just now getting around to reading people's poems for last week, since I've been ill and offline the last few days.

    I like how you contrast the immediate scene in the middle three lines (the feel of the cold, the boy picking a nickel) with the last, "only then I start counting galaxies". It's almost the effect of a camera panning out, from the little scene before us to the larger.

    I know what you mean by being in writing limbo -- I've been experiencing that on and off due to job responsibilities, personal issues, and illness taking away my time. May the muse visit you soon with a blessing of inspiration and direction.

    -Nicole

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