Wednesday, 20 October 2010

mirror at crossroads

immense resolutions
shimmer in the cauldron
steam arises out of it

I say I want to grow young with you
never old, exploring
everything new that we can

not just each other, but beyond-
the crossroads are my destinations
intersections are yours

with my finger tips
I trace out the steam off the mirror
while you watch the effect of it on me

"are you not pleased that we are both children in that image?"

37 comments:

  1. this has such a richness to it, such depth.

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  2. Gautami, I absolutely love this and that second stanza, says so much. I often feel exactly that way.
    Perfect to prompt.
    Pamela

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  3. Each stanza adds a sensitive layer of beauty! But that final one - tracing the steam and watching the effect on the image of another is creatively enchanting!

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  4. I love growing young with you...nice poem!

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  5. "I want to grow young with you" How lovely, how full of hope. Beautifully done.

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  6. This is beautiful Gautami. In a way it reminded me of Robert Browning's ode to Elizabeth Barrett Browning which is my very favorite 19th century poem and a great compliment--kind of went the opposite way while saying the same thing

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  7. I say I want to grow young with you
    never old ... wonderful!

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  8. The idea of growing young with the other is awesome - and I really liked the final stanza, a picture within a picture...

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  9. I love "I want to grow young with you"
    what an absolutely perfect thing to say!

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  10. As with many of the others, I was struck by the second stanza. Especially, "I want to grow young with you".

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  11. How wonderful! I love the idea of growing young together. What a great outlook.

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  12. Gautami, I love the idea of growing young with someone....we can be children as we wish in a mirror, I think. I do believe!

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  13. Hopeful togetherness leading to the reverse image of youth. Wonderful take on the prompt.

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  14. Nothing can beat a second childhood- especially if the first was not too good! :)

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  15. "..I say I want to grow young with you.." We should take this up as a motto for life. Very nice.

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  16. Allowing ourselves to explore and enjoy the wonder would evoke the child in us!

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  17. growing young together...i like that...very nicely layered piece...

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  18. I love the juxtaposition of the tangible and the everyday to the intangible and eternal.
    Thanks for sharing it.

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  19. this is so romantic, growing young together? Wow super writing!

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  20. beautiful! and i love the unexpected line of "i say i want to grow young with you/ never old, exploring/ everything new that we can" -- this is really lovely

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  21. Lovely message of freshness in shared crossroads. Always children in wonder and curiosity when we choose to be.

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  22. Have to get ahold of that mirror..eternal youth! You express so well the fleeting dream.

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  23. I love the idea of growing young through seeking everything new, rather than grwoing old together, and the implication of the final line is phenomenal.

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  24. exploring everything new that we can...

    what a lovely, intimate poem. thank you so much for linking.

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  25. Like everyone else I love the idea of growing young with you!

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  26. "are you not pleased that we are both children in that image?"
    Often I feel very much a child when I look at myself. All of a sudden, that doesn't seem to be a bad thing!

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  27. This declaration of love is a fine song.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  28. A beautiful poem so loaded with imagery and emotion. Very much like the crossroads and intersections.

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  29. Just beautiful. Nice take on the Mag. Love and Light, Sender

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  30. it is a wonderful rich read of resolutions...

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  31. loved the depth in the 2nd stanza. thousands of meanings in a small poem. wonderful work!

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  32. Beautifully crafted poem of love

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  33. YES to that beautiful moment of growing young together --- perfection of writing from the soul, for it is forever young. I adore this poem and the meaning it conveys.

    Oh so lovely, makes my heart sing for the love shared with my soul mate.

    Cheers,
    joanny

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