Sunday, 10 October 2010

Haibun: death vibes

Was she dead? It did not matter, if she was. More important, was he dead? Her eyes opened for a sec.

death vibes-
she sent those to him,
he, blemish to society

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Why don't you try something in 160 characters? Space included!

28 comments:

  1. Oooh there's a lot in that 160, well done!

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  2. I can understand about "death vibes." Nice haibun.

    My first Sunday 160: Sunday 160

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  3. dang...you say much in your 160...and set just the tone...great job!

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  4. "If looks could kill."

    Interesting 160.

    My 160 is here.

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  5. very powerful Alice said it best. "If looks could kill..."

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  6. Death vibes indeed...nicely done.

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  7. Very powerful words my friend xx Thanks for linking with Potluck xx

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  8. Very beautiful... Liked it so much and I think I will try this type some time soon.. and will let you know...

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  9. death vibes? she must be a sorcerer? wanting to phase-out those societal ills...

    very nice haibun? is it?

    thanks for taking part in my prompt this week...your served a challenging verse worth thinking!

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  10. Amazed by the likeness in message to mine.
    http://sillyfrogsusan.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/forensic-feelings/ ‎
    Yours holds even more power in fewer words:-)

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  11. ouch! death vibes. I'll be good!
    great post.

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  12. Wow! This packs a lot of meaning in a few words!

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  13. There is a distinct projection of a curse on the wind! Quite intimidating! Very clever use of powerful words!

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  14. Great 160. Thanks so much for playing. Love this.

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  15. dead vibes?interesting..nice 160

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  16. 160 degrees turn :D
    nicely done
    Cheers!!!

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  17. Wow! 160 that packs a punch. Well done...

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  18. WOW! death vibes. Powerful stuff.

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    help visit Talon to wish her a happy birthday today,
    Thanks!

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  20. The theme 4 our Monday poetry potluck this week is 7 sins…if you could write a poem related to our theme, link to our potluck, that’s would be a bliss to us, you could simply link in a random poem to share, the pleasure is all yours.
    check out us at http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/,
    our potluck is open Sunday 8pm to Wednesday, 8am.
    Hope to see you in our team this week.

    only one poem a week beginning next week.

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