Sunday 11 April 2010

mystical dawn

bamboo shoots beat against each other
the sound of it
in the silence of the night
scares away dark thoughts

how long have I been awake?
it seems like forever
aeons of time merging into it
is it morning yet?

bellowing curtains
shadow the moonlight
when dawn breaks in,
into the room

I fall asleep deeply, dead to the world
but very alive in mystical one

16 comments:

  1. Vivid scene with strong sensory hooks. This week I have gone for a Haiku as a simile. My Haiku is here

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  2. Ooh, I very much like the feeling of this one. Like John said, it's a vivid scene and you've really created a physical sense of it.

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  3. Hey Tami, sooooo nice! Right away I thought of a bamboo wind chime. They make a lot of noise too.
    Seems we are having a rash of bamboos shoots around today. :)

    Jim's Haiku Bones is here
    ..

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  4. dead to the real world and alive in the mystical one...there are those cultures who believe the dream world is the "real" one and this waking world is just imagination.

    I liked the bamboo curtain between the worlds.

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  5. I liked the use of italics for the speaker's thoughts.

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  6. Sometimes I stay awake just listening to the night - it's voice is very reassuring.

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  7. very precious dawn ...I love this sleepeasy ;)

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  8. A happy ending at last, like a sigh.

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  9. You brought pictures of a serene night to my mind. I totally agree the sound sleep you get in the early morning hours is a total bliss :)

    Loved visiting your wonderful blog :D

    Keep up the good work.

    Cheers!!

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  10. scare's away dark thoughts? not me i guess...the more i would be frightened and eager to see the new dawn!

    is it morning yet? I wish too...

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  11. Very well done. loved the images you sketched. the morning sleep is deep and peaceful.

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  12. Enjoyed the sense of falling deep into dream world. Mornings are perfect for that.

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  13. Well done. Good imagery and connection to the reader. Really enjoyed this.

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  14. "mystical dawn" is the perfect name.

    nice writing...flows smoothly
    almost like a song

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