Sunday, 11 April 2010

mystical dawn

bamboo shoots beat against each other
the sound of it
in the silence of the night
scares away dark thoughts

how long have I been awake?
it seems like forever
aeons of time merging into it
is it morning yet?

bellowing curtains
shadow the moonlight
when dawn breaks in,
into the room

I fall asleep deeply, dead to the world
but very alive in mystical one


  1. Vivid scene with strong sensory hooks. This week I have gone for a Haiku as a simile. My Haiku is here

  2. Ooh, I very much like the feeling of this one. Like John said, it's a vivid scene and you've really created a physical sense of it.

  3. Hey Tami, sooooo nice! Right away I thought of a bamboo wind chime. They make a lot of noise too.
    Seems we are having a rash of bamboos shoots around today. :)

    Jim's Haiku Bones is here

  4. dead to the real world and alive in the mystical one...there are those cultures who believe the dream world is the "real" one and this waking world is just imagination.

    I liked the bamboo curtain between the worlds.

  5. I liked the use of italics for the speaker's thoughts.

  6. Sometimes I stay awake just listening to the night - it's voice is very reassuring.

  7. very precious dawn ...I love this sleepeasy ;)

  8. A happy ending at last, like a sigh.

  9. You brought pictures of a serene night to my mind. I totally agree the sound sleep you get in the early morning hours is a total bliss :)

    Loved visiting your wonderful blog :D

    Keep up the good work.


  10. scare's away dark thoughts? not me i guess...the more i would be frightened and eager to see the new dawn!

    is it morning yet? I wish too...

  11. Very well done. loved the images you sketched. the morning sleep is deep and peaceful.

  12. Enjoyed the sense of falling deep into dream world. Mornings are perfect for that.

  13. Well done. Good imagery and connection to the reader. Really enjoyed this.

  14. "mystical dawn" is the perfect name.

    nice writing...flows smoothly
    almost like a song