Sunday 21 June 2009

deathless ghosts


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in that deathless night

dark images dance merrily

undead spirits come alive

ghost graves shake

melting into dead air

heat of that night

goes icily cold

I shiver thousand miles away.

"you would have understood me,
had you but waited."

21 comments:

  1. oh I love the other worldy feel of this one

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  2. Bugga, winter can cannot be far away!

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  3. Interesting: you change your area into a groovy, dark and gothic one.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  4. I think we all dance with ghosts from time to time. And, who doesn't get chills when someone walks over our grave. Great write. Have a nice night.

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  5. This is amazing...quite haunting and thrilling at the same time.

    I love the words that finish it too.

    I'm shocked to read your most recent post....I never thought that could happen. Thanks for the tale of caution. It must be a massive loss, I'm sorry. I can't imagine losing 3 years of work.

    Bella

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  6. The whole poem is a tight, visual piece of work & I love the last line!

    Peace,
    JP/deb


    Visual Assimilation

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  7. Ghostly when ghosts stir..I did not understand the last two lines though, it sort of popped up from nowhere..like a ghostly appearance

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  8. I like the quote at the end. Gives a voice to the spirits, for me.

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  9. Very visual...it made me shiver! Loved it... :~)

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  10. i always adore poetry with darker tones and this one is no exception. loved the visuals it offers

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  11. Tight rhythmic writing, lovely imagery

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  12. kind of mysterious, like someone far away is reaching you beyond the grave

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  13. You would have understood me had you just waited -

    truly a priceless line - brilliant

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  14. It eerily interesting. Gives a glimpse of how it would feel to be in that situation..huh!!

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  15. Mine's up at last. I apologise in advance if you find it a bit agressive!

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  16. hey gautami,
    this was beautiful.
    reminded me of something...

    beautiful work..

    am following the blog now!

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  17. Indeed, this tells a 'too late' tale. Nice work.

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