Sunday 8 March 2009

twister








tingling tongue
tantalised by
TANGY ORANGE-
now traumatised
the tongue
tingles

Also go join the NaisaiKu Challenge.

15 comments:

  1. My tongue tingled when I read this out loud...good one!

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  2. Fantastic flow and so sweet lol you have a way with words ;)

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  3. Tantalised and traumatised - even our taste buds live dramatic lives.

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  4. I like how you changed the repetitions to keep it fresh!

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  5. walking
    through the forest
    rain
    MY FEET ARE WET
    through
    the forest rain
    walking

    The T's ToTaly Tangled.

    Interesting! _m

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  6. I like the tantalising tingles - it's so vivid, it sparkles.

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  7. The 'T's make this work so well!

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  8. i like this :)
    tingles when seduced. tingles when traumatized.

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  9. satisfied thirsts. loved the t sounds

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  10. terribly teffic tongue twisting tone!

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  11. Tingling tongue twister! Love it Gautami!

    Third attempt at posting....

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  12. making my rounds late on the train... still haven't tried the naisaiKu. sounds like fun.

    tingling in vancouver...

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  13. I love tongue twisters-- this one is special for its effect on the tongue even by reading it silently! Very, very clever, as your poems always are--love this one.

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