Sunday 15 March 2009

lay in lace










nipped at waist
bodice laced-tight
LOST IN THAT MOMENT
both bodies lay together
fingers nipping into waist


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22 comments:

  1. I'd say 'delicious', but Sage beat me to it.

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  2. Certainly a good one, Gautami.

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  3. It's good to get lost in such moments - but old reality has a habit of eventually saying enough :-)

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  4. Very sensual! These few words paint quite the rich image!

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  5. I love the image...well done.

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  6. i'm sorry but imma use the word again: 'delicious!'

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  7. I love the sound of "fingers nipping"

    (and if you say it fast it sound like "finger snipping"!)

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  8. Hey, Nice One!!
    You write real well ... Hope to see you tomorrow at Tell a Tale, as it launches...
    Be the first one to post your entry and accumulate higher points!

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  9. Wow that was some write...sensuous!

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  10. I like how you created a nice moment with so few words.

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  11. I really liked this one a lot.

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  12. Hello Gautami.

    Lovely poem.

    To me, this conjures a Victorian ether party, before and after the bottle is opened.

    Or a coming out debutante's ball.

    Great work, Gautami.

    Tschuess,
    Chris

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  13. Very nice Tami but then you are a true poet. Lovely.


    love,Melanie-bd

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  14. Ah!, How romantic..really mushy and refreshing..
    Loved this!

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  15. Hi Gautami, Here I am, sorry I've been away, I could see your blog but my keyboard was swimming in coffee and would'nt let me post anything...

    That Moment seems like a nice place to be Lost in!!

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