Wednesday 4 March 2009

at age.....

at age seven, I dreamt of you
your lopsided genuine smile
reflected on my facade

at age sixteen, I craved for you
siding up to you for your touch

at age twenty one, I woke up
next to you, your ramble
tickling me senseless

at age thirty, I basked under
your love, only your love

at age forty, I am all alone
picking up the pieces after you
avenge what, sadly I know not

30 comments:

  1. very true, sad and beautiful

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  2. Love how you take us through the years...and through the feelings without a fairy-tale ending.

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  3. This is heartbreaking...you expressed it with eloquence.

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  4. i hate love stories like this... they always make me sad.

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  5. I like the way you are able to 'voice' what is happening in so many peoples lives!

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  6. Drew my in and kept me rapped all the way through. Nice.

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  7. 40 seems to be a painful and lonely age for so many, i felt this poem

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  8. The story of so many lives, unfortunately.

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  9. Half a lifetime in a few lines. So much joy and pain is contained in this poem!

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  10. That is so sweet and a little sad too :(

    seven to forty in a flash!

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  11. Well done! A bittersweet piece of life...

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  12. Was hoping for a happy ending!

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  13. The progressive story of life. Well done!

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  14. I walked with you this time. Very very nice one

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  15. Avenging for what! Exactly! Very poignant.

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  16. Like Tumblewords, I had hoped for a happy ending. But life isn't always like that, is it?

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  17. Hi Gautami, just stopped by to read this again, and that wise last line - avenge what? sadly I know not!
    -Andy

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  18. सुप्रभात, I liked the compression of emotion through time into minimal verses. Beautifully done.

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  19. Wow. I loved the journey, even though the ending was painful. Very eloquent.

    -Nicole

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  20. i couldn't agree more. beautiful.

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  21. this is a long time to go thru the motions with someone :(

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  22. Sad... I wonder what future years will bring.

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  23. the other commenters have all said it before me--beautiful and sad

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  24. so unfortuately true... especially in the ending.

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  25. Tami, this is beautiful sad but just wonderfully written. Well done my friend.


    love, Melanie

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  26. Heartbreaking, yes, is the first word that came to my mind.

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