Thursday, 10 April 2008

slithering snakes

strange hissing sounds
sure, had brought me here this night
sultry atmospheric feelings in my heart

as if tearing through barbed wire
my skin twitched
In every pore and every nerve.

withholding to the carved door
I strived for sanity even though
I was spinning- hard and fast-

snakes slithered at my feet
coming in hoards
from their opened underground caves

fearing the darkness, I fell on the doorstep
rolling into fetal position,
willing the reptiles away

"when daylight broke, I was entwined
by ropes of my own thoughts"


Lines have been taken from Paisley, Mariacristina, Lirone, Writerwoman, and Lissa for Patchwork Poetry!


  1. Wow, I'm very impressed by how you put this did you know where to go looking for the lines, it is well-stitched too.

  2. very well done, all the lines sounded just right

    I like the ending, I think that's the best line, I think I had that same dream and I'm also terribly afraid of snakes so you dive into that fear quite well

  3. oops, again I forgot to leave a direct URL, which I'm trying to do with Blogger blogs cause I really think people don't care much to browse my blogger profile page

  4. Very strong imagery here throughout. Excellent work!

  5. it is well stitched! Also makes me feel a bit queasy, all those snakes together,,,,

  6. Nicely done! Slithering snakes and ropes of thought! Nice!

  7. I really enjoyed this. We poets are weird- consumed by our own thoughts... love it!

  8. It's great how you wove these lines into an integral whole!

    The Maggots

  9. Fantastic ending and I love all the "s" sounds in here! Gave me chills!

  10. I like where all these lines took you, gautami. I still haven't posted mine. It's fun, isn't it?

  11. This poem scared me. Nice job!

  12. Very intense. The imagery of the snakes makes this poem have a primal feeling to it.

  13. That worked out really well, Gautami. What fantastic imagery, as others have said. Mostly, though, this was really sensory -- sultry atmospheric feelings in my heart.

    Wow. What a line!

  14. Loved that. And very apt. Myth and mind are so closely related.

  15. such imagery. Great movement and transition.
    Been there too

  16. It is really amazing the way you have stringed together those different lines; great work!

  17. This is ssssssssuperb!

    However I do feel taking a ssssshot at sssssnakes is not in ones best interest essssspecially while sssstanding in front of one.

    Chief CEO
    Snakes Worldwide Inc.

  18. thiss is nice, esspecially the ending. :)

  19. nightmarish stuff... well done!