Wednesday 2 April 2008

parallel plot

yellowed paper fell from my journal
my eyes scanned through the mysterious markings
did astronomy play a part?
was it about a parallel world
faded out of vision by the familiar one?
writings on the wall had not warned me
I kept speculating about its origin
how did it come about in my pocket book
almost brittle piece of paper with frayed edges
stars and squiggles with lines and curves

"give me that paper, it is mine"
my five-years old niece came to me with a bounce
almost snatching it from my hand!

27 comments:

  1. Made me smile. The vehemence of innocence.

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  2. You always surprise me with your endings, great one

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  3. Loved the mystery of the first part, with a great smile to round out the piece :)

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  4. So readily explained! Neat writing!

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  5. Love the deep thoughts followed by the five year old

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  6. Happens every day around here!

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  7. Love it! Just before the last sentance I had thought it was placed there by yourself who was from another dimension! Great ending!

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  8. mysterious markings in... crayon! Very cute Gautami!

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  9. Cool, great ending, collapsing the mysteries of the universe into the enthusiasm of a child, lovely,

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  10. Great style here! I could picture that paper and the drawing on it! love your little niece!

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  11. LOL You always catch me with your endings. ;) Delightful Tami!

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  12. things that make you go...hmmmmm.....

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  13. Nice lead up to cheery ending

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  14. who knows where the cold wind blows?

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  15. This was so cute Gautami :)

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  16. another mystery of the universe explained

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  17. That made me smile at the end. What a bossy young thing! and the imagination of a writer, getting lost in her fancies, until...poof! fun read, gautami.

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  18. How clever, fun, witty and playful this read was! Loved it! thanks!

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  19. wonderful!
    Aren't kids fun. LOL!

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    Enjoy your day!

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  20. I was so convinced you had written it and forgotten it... until she bounced in. Much fun!

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  21. I always like a surprise ending.

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  22. you are certainly a master of punch line.
    great stuff as always

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  23. Kids definitely live in a parallel, almost alien universe. Great twist on the plot.

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