Saturday 26 April 2008

intermission-------Writers Island



sweet smell of hibiscus tickles the nose
dark green leaves softly sway in the air
moist earth cools the feet
I watch the gentle night slowly unfolding
taking the light away from the surroundings
I absorb it, my irises growing wide
wondering at the sheer beauty of it all
when sudden rains pelt on my head, jolting me
I find their intrusion downright outrageous

13 comments:

  1. Man, I got pelted by rain like this just this afternoon. I totally know how outrageous its intrusion can be.

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  2. Nothing is worse than intrusion. Even of the variety you mention.

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  3. Rain is a way of life for us in the UK. A constant intrusion! Nice piece once again

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  4. Your words made me feel what you felt was an intrusion as refreshing your post is wonderful.

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  5. Heh! Don't you hate when nature intrudes on your nature watching? Nice use of the senses in this poem. :)

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  6. YOU........... do not like it when it rains????

    Shame on ya!

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  7. oh, i can relate... we have had more than a fair share of showers lately... but april is a fickle month here...

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  8. just love the pelting of the rain drops :)..so may be I would love the intrusion as well :)

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  9. It wasn't so much the rain, but the intrusion of the moment, huh? Lovely!

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  10. Talk about you wake-up calls.

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  11. It's about control. Grin. Neat post - enjoyed it a great deal!

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  12. I was enjoying your beautiful imagery when I was jolted by the rain. :)

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  13. I love rain but I agree, on a beautiful sunny day it can feel like an intruder.

    Very descriptive and well written.


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