Sunday, 23 September 2012

ash laden reality

Flying Down, 2006, by David Salle
spiral traps me
I am stuck to the wall
you will paint me with damp ash
I will hide in the corners before bolts lock me in
the bird climbed down to be with me
bundles of straw stuck to her wings
what remains of that storm
which you conjured in your imagination
evidence of it shook out that tiny plane

"do bring some husk to cover the smooth floor,
I am not going to last in the corner for long"
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21 comments:

  1. Laurie Kolp23 September 2012 at 09:38

    Enigmatic...

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  2. Kay23 September 2012 at 12:06

    wow...loved this and the images it conjured x

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  3. Tess Kincaid23 September 2012 at 12:18

    It's hard to survive in a corner...lovely write...

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  4. christopher23 September 2012 at 12:29

    Wow. You led me to think of the holy men who walk naked wearing chains.

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  5. brenda w23 September 2012 at 12:32

    This is a wonderful write, Gautami. Nice use of the words and picture.

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  6. S.E.Ingraham23 September 2012 at 16:44

    This is, as others have said, enigmatic and I love that about it. It has an immediacy that feels urgent and the words wind through it naturally. Well done.

    http://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2012/09/22/releasing-an-angel/

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  7. joanne24 September 2012 at 06:34

    felt very surreal...nice job

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  8. Helen24 September 2012 at 09:05

    This felt dreamlike to me .. lovely.

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  9. sreeja harikrishnan24 September 2012 at 09:59

    this goes with the painting so much..very brilliant.....

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  10. Hannah24 September 2012 at 12:02

    Nice literal translation of this image...very much enjoyed!

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  11. Wayne Pitchko24 September 2012 at 13:47

    very very nice Gautami....thanks for sharing your words

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  12. Wayne Pitchko24 September 2012 at 13:49

    very nide Gautami...thanks for sharing

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  13. Gail24 September 2012 at 16:36

    Pretty good.

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  14. Linda24 September 2012 at 19:45

    I really like your poem Gautami. The feeling of being trapped and finding survival difficult, reminds me of the poem you wrote about being encased in marble. Thank you for sharing this. =D

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  15. Susie Clevenger24 September 2012 at 22:27

    Stuck in a corner..that says so much to me. Sometimes life corners us and we hope that even if it takes a fall to free us someone will be there to sweep up our broken pieces.

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  16. Catfish Tales24 September 2012 at 23:53

    Echoing Tess's comment. And, yes, disturbing on a bare bones level.

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  17. Karen S.25 September 2012 at 18:24

    Corners can be so inviting, but stuck in a corner can have it's draw backs...nice poem.

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  18. Tumblewords:25 September 2012 at 20:12

    A very cool combination of wordle and image!

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  19. Ritva26 September 2012 at 09:43

    "you will paint me with damp ash" Loved it!

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  20. Ella26 September 2012 at 19:20

    I love your take on the prompt!
    The visual of leaving the nest and still being attached :D
    Wow, well done~

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  21. Jack28 September 2012 at 06:00

    Gautami,

    Read 4 poems now. Each one has own standing. These words are so true - waking eyes see the inner soul
    only an open mind can fathom the depth.

    Take care

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