you float in and out
more out than in
I try to hold the wild images
chasing images merge into the walls
that sense of lost intangibles
submerges into depression
shadows of your translucent skin
is imprinted everywhere
I want to walk away
from the interloper
(which is nothing but conjured images)
mortality of my feelings is at its tether
destiny brought us together
destiny will part us
I can still hear you saying,
"it is our pleasure"
but I cannot hold it any longer
I will let it slip through my fingers
"if you so desire, it is your turn to thaw me"
The sadness of losing touch is as cold (and as powerful) as the month you describe..Jae
ReplyDeletethe conjured images and the feelings associated with them are captured so beautifully here...
ReplyDeleteshadows of ... translucent
ReplyDeletenow that's a thought
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It sounded like a relationship that was one sided. It is very hard to love someone and they don't return that love in full measure. Better the hurt now that the bigger pain tomorrow. Choose someone not so wild next time. I really enjoyed this work.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Westlander Poetry on this. You have captured the images skillfully.
ReplyDeleteAlong with relationships and seasons, I thought of the lose of time. How thin it truly is, how it spills through our fingers, times when we are hungry for more, and other times when we want it no more. And then the statement at the end brings me back to a relationship which one partner has worked on and yearns for the other hand in compromise.
ReplyDeleteSad and intense.
ReplyDeleteNice article, thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteVery good poem!
ReplyDeleteCame here from your link at the Poets United Poetry Pantry...
I really liked the phrase "mortality of my feelings." Sad, but good.
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery you have created! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully composed poem :)
ReplyDeleteDepression
destiny will bring us together and it will tear us apart...true that...and what we let slip through our fingers is choice...
ReplyDeleteInteresting that you have 'winter' in the title, but that everything in the poem is prelude to that winter, a foreboding, an omen.
ReplyDeletetrying to hold on to someone image after a break up is so sad, and I've done it often trying to retain his looks in my eyes. good poem
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intense..melancholic..wonderfully written..
ReplyDeleteCaptures the winter of loss
ReplyDeletedestiny brought us together
ReplyDeletedestiny will part us..
something really happens in life which is written by god...
A reminder that others come in and out of our lives. The challenge, I think, is to understand what they have to teach us.
ReplyDeleteSo deeply covers emotional ground i love it
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully and hauntingly expressed, the flow of words adding to the feelings evoked. Beautiful work.
ReplyDeleteGautami,
ReplyDeleteRead 2 poems now. Both show love but in different shades.
Take care
Gautami,
ReplyDeleteRead 2 poems now. Both show love but in different shades.
Take care
Nothing cold hearted about you.!
ReplyDeleteWho knows where the cold wind blows?
I do!
I love your turn of phrase here.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery is so vivid...the words so poignant and profound.
This was an absolute masterpiece.