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candles flicker
I hear a jingling sound,
and cower under the shadows of that tower
why, you ask?
I shake my head at the clouds
dark, ominous, intimidating
the tower seems harmless
I slowly climb to top
the city unfolds
(error in my judgement about the tower)
I now know my mistake.
with half a smile
I watch two bears fighting in the clouds
the trees sway in the drama
their laughter reaching the sky
tower stands tall vindicated,
and enfolds me in its embracing warmth
"when do I realize that
I have been totally fenced?"
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This painting is from 1596-1600. Yet seems very modern, as if from the present period. El Greco must have been a visionary.....
Thanks Poetry Jam, for making me explore various forms pf arts...
beautiful imagery of being trapped.
ReplyDeleteReally beautiful!
ReplyDeleteI get such a warm feeling when I read your words. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteYour verse serves as a clear and vivid descriptor of the painting of olde.
ReplyDeleteWhat seems ominous is often not.
ReplyDeleteI always liked this quite ominous painting of the hillside city by El Greco. His work does seem quite modern. Glad your character found warmth!
ReplyDeleteI love the message in this poem. Fear not scaling intimidating heights for when you do, you will witness the most breathtaking views of your life. Food for thought for all of us.
ReplyDeleteSo meaningful....
ReplyDeleteAhhh... escaping to our own prison! Very artfully woven in this and your prose does the picture proud! :)
ReplyDeleteVery, very nice write.
Your captcha thing is soooooo difficult to understand!
Nice images you drew here ~ Lovely share ~
ReplyDelete"the tower seems harmless" Ahh...famous last words. It's always that which seems harmless that strikes hardest. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteyou create really beautiful imagery with your words.
ReplyDeletenew follower to your poetry blog!
I want to say don't go, turn around! Then the pay off is so wonderful.
ReplyDeleteYou saw so many wonderful elements in this painting ... so nice!!
ReplyDeleteha i like that you see two bears fighting in the clouds...i love finding stuff in the clouds...really nice...though i am not sure i want to be fenced in...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very intriguing poem with a nice twist at the end. A parodox, the protagonist being fenced in, yet embraced by warmth. You describe the conflicting emotions so well :)
ReplyDeletei love this painting by el Greco and you have written a very different slant on it ...thankyou
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece as well as the painting! Nothing is what it seems and discovering that you are totally fenced is interesting!
ReplyDeletei love the idea of the tower....
ReplyDeletewonderful and frightening ~ the perfect poem for this painting! LOVE it!
ReplyDeletethank you for participating at Poetry Jam!
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dani
my heart's love songs
Wonderful interpretation of the painting. Love the two bears fighting in the clouds and the realization, at the end, that one has been fenced in........
ReplyDeleteYou are as free as your will even when cornered in. I hope that the third eye stays open.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my way!
Gautami I forgot just how much I love your writing, I'll be back
ReplyDeletelove your writing. Pls visit the link--http://writingonjusttowrite.blogspot.in/2012/06/archana-sharma-has-passed-kreative.html
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