when I heard
time to say goodbye
crimson tears flowed freely
no, you cannot see those
they are flowing in the inside
that crunch in my heart
you cannot hear
I don't expect you too
I am compelled to forget
but I know I cannot
when the crimson tears turn clear
I will know I am cleansed
I will burn with the cinders
while you watch from afar
that kindling in your hand
will remind you of your doing
"time to say goodbye"
I whisper to the fire
This seems to be a romantic poem about lost love but since it's mother's day here in the US, I could see this being about a child going off on their own.
ReplyDeleteGood byes are also new beginnings. How strange is that.
Lovely images.
This is touching deep.
ReplyDeleteintense..carries a deep emotion that is beautifully written..
ReplyDeleteMy take : The Scarlet Bond.
Nice composition!:)
ReplyDeleteBeautifully intense.
ReplyDeletewhen the crimson tears turn clear
ReplyDeleteI will know I am cleansed
Oh so true!! :)
crimson with sparkling energy!
ReplyDeleteThat kindling in his hand while watching your fire says 'he did her wrong.' Very nice, Tami.
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Lovely!
ReplyDeletetouching...
ReplyDeletehow sad, and yet nice...sometime the goodbyes are a necessity :)
ReplyDeletehow sad, and yet nice...sometime the goodbyes are a necessity :)
ReplyDeleteThe sadness of the title percolates through the whole of this poem.
ReplyDeleteSo powerful and intense!
ReplyDeleteI was visiting you but not commenting..becuase after reading you what could I say..nothing will suffice..like this poem here.. it's so beautiful, special to your heart..nothing should be said..only savoured..
ReplyDeleteRS:)
I hate goodbyes~!
ReplyDeleteSo glad you found your muse again because this is lovely!
adorable !!
ReplyDeletetouching also ...
Speaks to the heart in a really deep way. Nicely crafted.
ReplyDeleteThis is so good. The last stnza is so poignant.
ReplyDeleteI so relate to the cleansed feeling after all that crimson tears run clear. good work.
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting my poetry blog. I am glad you liked the visit and I hope you will try to write haiku it's such a pleasure.
ReplyDeleteI would like to invite you to be part of my "Tackle It Tuesday" challenge. You can write a haiku on a given prompt and share that with us through a linking tool. The prompt for this week is Magnolia.
Enjoy writing poetry and maybe you will enjoy haiku too.
http://chevrefeuilleshaikublog.blogspot.com/2012/05/tackle-it-tuesday-day-2-magnolia.html
Gautami,
ReplyDeleteRead 2 poems now. Both convey deep meaning in two different aspects of life.
Take care
Deep and emotional. Thanks for your support of COT, I really appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful !
ReplyDeleteThe language is awesome..
ReplyDeletesome goodbyes burn forever...they etch your mind and soul..someone kindles the thought...a tear returns...part of your birth has been remembered...
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