Tuesday, 31 January 2012

opposites

hidden by the fog
I walked blindly
chasing the road as if in a blind alley
sounds of chilly wind chased me
silence of my chilled heart propelled me
I stumbled in the cobbled path
fell down on my knees,
compelled to kiss the frosted earth

when I reached home
I didn't see the light at first
but seeing you sleeping so peacefully
I jumped on our bed
kissed the roof with glee
cool surface drove away my guilt
innocence of your love merged into me

"when you wake up
I will make up
until then I am going to figure out
how to stand upside down"
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22 comments:

  1. ayala31 January 2012 at 10:35

    Love these lines...I jumped on our bed
    kissed the roof with glee
    cool surface drove away my guilt
    innocence of your love merged into me....I can feel the anticipation and the love....

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  2. Myrna R.31 January 2012 at 11:36

    I happened to visit Poets United today. Don't have time to respond to the prompt. But I think you did a wonderful job. I love this poem, and how did you ever find a picture to match so well?

    You use lovely words to create clear imagery.

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  3. De31 January 2012 at 12:50

    "until then I am going to figure out
    how to stand upside down"

    LOVE this line!

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  4. barbara31 January 2012 at 13:32

    Wonderful conclusion.
    I really like this take on the image.

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  5. Tarang Sinha1 February 2012 at 01:05

    Nice!:)

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  6. Natasha Head1 February 2012 at 02:22

    I thought this a fantastic play with the image and my favorite lines have already been shared by others. A wonderful write!

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  7. Caerlynn1 February 2012 at 04:53

    Nice poem. My favorite phrase is "chasing the road." I think there's another prompt in that.

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  8. vivinfrance1 February 2012 at 06:11

    great fun.

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  9. nan1 February 2012 at 06:15

    Nice. Love the ending!

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  10. flaubert1 February 2012 at 10:08

    Yes, literally is good, Gautami. I love your take on the pic.

    Pamela

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  11. Raven's Wing Poetry1 February 2012 at 13:15

    I like the contrast between kissing the ground and kissing the ceiling, between the chill of wandering alone and the warmth of home.

    -Nicole

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  12. Ray Sharp2 February 2012 at 07:53

    a fine poem, very clever and a great ending!

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  13. Laurie Kolp2 February 2012 at 11:31

    Lovely piece... great ending!

    http://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2012/02/test-water.html

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  14. meiro2 February 2012 at 22:12

    Nice piece

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  15. Brian Miller4 February 2012 at 05:55

    nice...as with others the end is my fav part...

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  16. Christine4 February 2012 at 13:26

    nice way to conclude the tormenting thoughts of the first part, making up will do that

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  17. Elaine4 February 2012 at 13:56

    This is wonderful. So deep and meaningful with a lovely lighthearted twist at the end.

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  18. irene4 February 2012 at 18:41

    Yes a lovely interpretation indeed.

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  19. Margaret8 February 2012 at 18:56

    Stand upside down? ha Let's hope he wakes up soon...
    Very playful poem

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  20. Anup Sadi10 February 2012 at 23:29

    Panoramic poetry, full of scenarios & imagery.

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  21. Shauna23 February 2012 at 11:37

    gorgeous: fear and love, in the
    span of one night.

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  22. Whitesnake27 February 2012 at 05:50

    Blood rush too the head........ Not good!

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