Sunday, 1 January 2012

drifting words

I put the final stitches to that patch
yarn was coming apart
my plum sweater was a gift from the past
the letters had stopped coming
I had not expected the drift
I shovelled that sense of loss
and let the wind stop my thoughts
shouldn't I have spun a tale for friends
change the old to new?

"an image that forms behind the eyes
how do I explain dancing words?"
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26 comments:

  1. HyperCRYPTICal1 January 2012 at 09:40

    A wonderful write!

    Anna :o]

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  2. brenda w1 January 2012 at 13:19

    This flowed fast a furiously. It reads like it came to you quickly from a muse with something to say. Excellent write!

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  3. zongrik1 January 2012 at 14:35

    i liked how you linked this to the old/new theme going around for new year

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  4. Traci B1 January 2012 at 14:47

    Great poem, gautami. You express so many emotions and desires in so few lines.

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  5. oldegg1 January 2012 at 15:05

    No, some secrets of the past should be held tight within you. I love to imagine those dancing words behind your eyes, but don't tell me their secret.

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  6. J Cosmo Newbery1 January 2012 at 15:45

    Regrets, I've had a few...

    Emotive writing. Thank you.

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  7. Magical Mystical Teacher1 January 2012 at 16:37

    The tale should be spun, I think, only if the friends are willing to sit still long enough to listen...

    A Whirl of Haiku

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  8. Peggy1 January 2012 at 19:44

    Excellent. I enjoy concise verse like this that gives just the hints of a story. Happy New Year.

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  9. The Write Girl1 January 2012 at 20:25

    This is beautiful. I especially love the turn it takes in the final lines. Nicely written.

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  10. Cheryl1 January 2012 at 21:39

    Very concise and wonderful!

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  11. Gyanban1 January 2012 at 22:03

    Beautifully written ! Liked the touch of nostaliga...

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  12. Harshad mehta2 January 2012 at 02:08

    Words in your writings are freely dancing. Always a pleasure to watch that dance.

    no need to explain even if you can.

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  13. Ramesh Sood2 January 2012 at 03:52

    I always come here to enjoy what yu write.. and it always leaves me awe strcuk.. Thanks Gautami..for each treat..A very Happy New Year to You and yours..

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  14. Ostensible Truth2 January 2012 at 05:36

    nice write here! great flow, nice seeing it up at Real Toads

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  15. Lilibeth2 January 2012 at 05:53

    I loved the way you shoveled that sense of lost. It expresses it very well.

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  16. PsycheBubbles2 January 2012 at 06:42

    A very distinct style uve got!
    Lovely. Keep sharing!

    Happy new year! :)

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  17. Nita Jo2 January 2012 at 07:51

    I love the imagery in your writing!

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  18. Sherry Blue Sky2 January 2012 at 08:58

    So well done.

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  19. Marian2 January 2012 at 10:38

    wow, nice, like a whirlwind. or an unraveling sweater. happy new year!

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  20. Kay L. Davies2 January 2012 at 11:14

    Beautifully done!
    All the best to you for 2012.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  21. Marbles in My Pocket2 January 2012 at 16:43

    Wonderful write!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/31/one-day-at-a-time/

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  22. Caty2 January 2012 at 18:30

    yeah, i feel this exactly...brilliant write :)

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  23. booguloo3 January 2012 at 14:32

    I like it. The words danced.

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  24. Taylor Boomer4 January 2012 at 14:52

    Glad for what you did,

    Happy New Year.

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  25. Chèvrefeuille4 January 2012 at 18:56

    Loved reading this poem. Thank you for sharing

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  26. Andy5 January 2012 at 16:25

    Hello.
    I enjoyed reading this. Especially liked the last couple of stanzas.
    Nicely done, as usual!
    Thanks for sharing.

    A Poet's Immortal Thoughts

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