under that tree I kept it hidden
the sheen of your sweat
which had flowed for me in desire.
who dug it out,
along with my sensuality
which I had packed inside a bubble?
the air evokes you for me,
moving in a lumber way-
now it blows too fast
leaving a wreck behind.
"I will again create a bridge and reach out for you"
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Writing another keepsake poem was tough. I don't think I succeeded. Thanks We Write Poem for using my prompt for this week
Fascinating use of the words, with a lot of imagery that simply would not have occurred to me to use with those words. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI like that sensuality packed in a bubble. Makes me think of glass ornaments--and Bubble Wrap.
ReplyDeleteon the contrary, I think you succeeded! Lovely flow to this. Thank you for the great and challenging prompt!
ReplyDeleteGautami, you handle this type of writing beautifully. Nice imagery.
ReplyDeletePamela
Truly beautiful imagery.
ReplyDeleteLovely imagery and I like the idea of creating a bridge to reach out...
ReplyDeletecreating bridges is what life is all about isnt it...
ReplyDeleteI am so happy to be back here..this is pure magic..Gautami..
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery in this beautiful poem Gautami!
ReplyDeleteNice 'sensuality' here. Thanks for 'jamming' with us over at Poetry Jam. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteI liked the sensual desire expressed in this piece that mirrors the feeling of being completely spent in your love but yearning for that moment again.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, but if he left her in a wreck the fist time, why would she want to revisit him?
ReplyDeleteBut you really did succeed. A lovely poem strongly sensual - what could be better than a poem for a keepsake!
ReplyDeleteSeems very gusty, the sentiments.
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem. I love the images that play in my mind after reading it.
ReplyDeleteamazing talent.
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Just full of lovely imagery
ReplyDeleteThe feelings you have evoked are so strong and lingering..a keepsake..for certain..Jae
ReplyDeleteincredible imagery.
ReplyDeleteVery accomplished poem.
ReplyDeleteA collage of love, no less...
ReplyDeleteYou map those thin surfaces of air-tormented skin and sweat sheen superbly. A feather, it seems, could knock her over in this state.
ReplyDeletereaching out always leaves the bridge intact, lovely poem
ReplyDeletewhich had flowed for me in desire.
ReplyDeletewho dug it out,
along with my sensuality
which I had packed inside a bubble?
love the lines, vivid imagery.
definitely a successful poem! i love your portrayal of sensuality without being too explicit. the final line is a lovely expression of yearning.
ReplyDeletethank you so much for your wonderful response to the Poetry Jam prompt.
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