Tuesday, 8 November 2011

falling apart

when the sole of my shoe fell apart
I twisted my ankle
my knees gave away
I fell on the ground
my shin bone hurt
my elbows balanced my body
my cheeks pressed to the ground
I give away to tears
why when everything was going good
my shoe fell apart
taking me down
(serves me right)
I will not hitch a ride
I will muster my strength
from the wine I drank
in the late afternoon

"I want to call out, where are you 
but who cares?
I will sleep hugging the earth"

24 comments:

  1. Very well done. I can remember something like this happening when I used to wear heels and one came off. You've also reminded me I need to go shoe-shopping this week. I'm of an age now when falling is quite likely, so I only wear high-quality flat shoes with orthotic insoles and I'm down to just one pair, which is almost worn out.
    Your writing is excellent.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  2. oo very evocative..not just the fall but the desire to cry out in hopes maybe that someone hears...

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  3. I like the specificness of the poem's question, not "why" but "why NOW?", and the depiction of the stages in the downward crumple.

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  4. (P.S. I don't mean I enjoy the crumple! but how you depict it!)

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  5. Its beautiful... I liked it a lot... Thanks for sharing..

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html

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  6. That's rough. As the years pass, fear of helplessness increases for me. This captures just such a fear.

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  7. Waiting to be seen and heard, beautiful!

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  8. The bottom of our shoes tell many stories..you have told this one beautifully as ever..Jae

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  9. I guess everything is connected to the shoe umm sole, great verse.

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  10. You have done this well!!
    I see the determination to get back on those feet ~
    "taking me down
    (serves me right)
    I will not hitch a ride
    I will muster my strength"
    The last lines are sad when timely help is not coming forth!!

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  11. from the soul....nicely done and thanks for sharing

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  12. nicely done. those darn heels always trying to pull you down.

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  13. Interesting use of the three words; thanks.

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  14. Perhaps a little too much wine?

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  15. I loved the pace and pathos in this piece. Great work

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  16. (serves me right) stayed with me and I went back to re-read. It makes me wonder when I fall, where have I gone wrong. Is hubris at the core of most falls? Thought-provoking.

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  17. When you've gotta go (down) you gotta go!

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  18. I sure hope this wasn't a true story! If so, I hope you're OK :)

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  19. Life has a way of tripping you up when you least expect it.

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  20. Hello.
    We will trip, stumble & fall, but our inner voice always compels us to pick ourselves up & keep on moving.

    You expressed this very well.
    Thanks for sharing, Gautami.

    Imaginary Dreams

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