Sunday, 27 November 2011

fulcrum of my thoughts

anger spinning out of control
I lash out at you
my face so ruddy
your smug smile incenses me

I find that untidy envelope
gullible words rustle in my ear
I shudder in a subliminal way
but sunshine mellows me

you, the fulcrum of my thoughts,
make anger rush out.
come, let me hold you close,
let me exist in a fool's paradise.
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25 comments:

  1. brenda w27 November 2011 at 08:55

    Gorgeous write, Gautami. I've been there, love the words here.

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  2. Laura Maria27 November 2011 at 09:00

    Great take on the prompt! I love this and can totally relate!!

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  3. Cheryl27 November 2011 at 09:22

    This is so very lovely.

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  4. anthonynorth27 November 2011 at 09:42

    So many will relate to this.

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  5. Morning27 November 2011 at 10:30

    This one is brilliant.

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  6. Other Mary27 November 2011 at 10:34

    I like your metaphors. In particular I like the lines, 'I find that untidy envelope/ gullible words rustle in my ear'

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  7. Celestial Dreamz27 November 2011 at 18:38

    a brilliant write ...

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  8. The Write Girl27 November 2011 at 19:05

    This made me smile. Enjoyed the ride of these thoughts. Nice poem.

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  9. Sherry Blue Sky28 November 2011 at 09:22

    Wow, the surprising turnaround took me by surprise. Love the last line. "Been there, done that, Got the t-shirt!" :-)

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  10. rch28 November 2011 at 09:27

    very evocative of past relationships gone bad but what is life without a little illusion?

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  11. :-Dee28 November 2011 at 09:36

    Love the choice of words. Enjoyed it. :)

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  12. Old Raven28 November 2011 at 10:38

    You have created a richness of emotion.

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  13. Abin Chakraborty28 November 2011 at 10:43

    very well written indeed.we all connect with the emotions in our own ways.

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  14. Laurie Kolp28 November 2011 at 11:17

    Awesome poem... I really like the ending.

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  15. Mama Zen28 November 2011 at 12:19

    Outstanding write!

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  16. Jinksy28 November 2011 at 12:53

    Hm... fool's paradise is not a good place to visit, eh?

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  17. Fireblossom28 November 2011 at 14:51

    Those smug smiles set me off, too!

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  18. lynnaima28 November 2011 at 18:19

    what a bittersweet proposition!!!:(
    my entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/10/28/ratatouille/

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  19. Amity28 November 2011 at 19:01

    Wonderful!

    Really a fool's paradise...:D

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  20. Ella28 November 2011 at 20:33

    oooh, I love this, the last line sums it all up! ah, yes the Fool's paradise...we all end up visiting that place! Remarkable~

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  21. Marianne29 November 2011 at 05:28

    Spectacular use of the wordle words! I really struggled with this one.

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  22. Ramesh Sood29 November 2011 at 09:49

    A beautiful poem.. loved it..

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  23. Mike Patrick29 November 2011 at 10:57

    I really like this one, Gautami. One of the smoother uses of those difficult words that I’ve seen. You brought them all together beautifully.

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  24. Mystic_Mom29 November 2011 at 18:56

    Wonderfully done!

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  25. The Gooseberry Garden6 December 2011 at 19:33

    How is your day?

    Time flies, appreciated your handsome inputs to our poetry picnic.

    Share a poem today.
    Bless you.
    Happy December,
    Enjoy A Wonderful Wednesday Ahead.

    xoxox

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