Saturday, 31 July 2010

crumbling walls

I create miniscule space-
hide there blissfully
when the walls hit me
I don't feel the pain
where did the walls come from?
I did not build those
I like vast openness
with surprises in between.
minds eye journeys through
obstacles, stops at a corner
to rest and rejuvenate.

thats where I find you, my hero-
with your arms open for me,
a cocoon of love and security

25 comments:

  1. Often we feel smothered, and it's at these times we need the arms of a loved one for comfort.

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  2. how fantastic to have a love like that.

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  3. I am stuck between walls, so I really love this...crumbling walls

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  4. Love the contrast of minuscule space for protection and the freedom of vast space! An interesting piece!

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  5. Life sometimes causes those walls to be built, even when we don't notice the construction. To find someone special whose love pulls the walls down is indeed a gift in life.

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  6. Your romantic poetry is always so lovely...

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  7. Gautami
    this is beautifully romantic!
    Pamela

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  8. We seem to be on a very similar wavelength today, you went one way, I went another. I really like where you went.

    Elizabeth

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  9. This is such an interesting take on the prompt.Well done Gautami, really enjoyed reading this work.

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  10. Wonderfully written! Great take on the prompt!

    -Weasel

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  11. I love the wide open spaces with surprises! And the word "hero" holds so much emotion!

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  12. Cocoon - Symbol of love & security.
    Excellent.

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  13. Interesting how you go from walls to arms wrapped around you. Your hero! Indeed, arms feel better than unwanted walls! Lovely!

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  14. Beautiful. To have such a cocoon to return to must be wonderful. Thank you.

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  15. A wonderful cocoon! Love the imagery in this piece!

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  16. Oh I could feel being cocooned in a hero's arms...:)

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  17. Love the last stanza- I love a cocoon of love and security...perfect interpretation!

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  18. How beautiful, to love like that.

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  19. One love like that !! thats what we all need :)

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  20. http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2010/08/between-u-and-me.html

    here is my entry for journey…
    thanks for the feedback!

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  22. Walls we build can be treacherous. Your poet found a lasting comfort.
    Sorry I'm so late in getting back here, my week was very busy and hectic.
    ..

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  23. Love how the mind in its fluidity overcomes walls we have outgrown.

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