Wednesday, 20 January 2010

tattoos, race car, mobile oil and book

he, in that oil-stained overall
works around his racing car
with single-minded passion
that defies everything

she sits in the shade with a book-
reading with absorption

when heat gets to him
the overall is off
sweat trickles down
highlighting his tattoos

she steals a glance-
watches the play of muscles

he feels it too-
measures that intensity
through his own flared feeling
teeters up from his work

her book drops, pages dog-ear
with baited breath, she waits for him

isn't it all so ideal-
her tattooed male smells of mobile oil,
sweat, and flared desire
she succumbing to it all
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26 comments:

  1. anthonynorth20 January 2010 at 06:36

    Very passionate today. But will he fix your car?

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  2. ThomG20 January 2010 at 07:45

    Steamy! I like the way this builds.

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  3. Andy Sewina20 January 2010 at 07:51

    Phew, she is a cheap night out...

    ...if only it was all so easy, or am I missing out?

    <3

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  4. b20 January 2010 at 09:41

    Loved it!!

    b

    http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2010/01/three-word-wednesdaysouth-pacific.html

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  5. Percy Bisque Silley20 January 2010 at 10:19

    Ugh... Phew...

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  6. Sweetest in the Gale20 January 2010 at 11:00

    I could feel the heat...great read!

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  7. sarah20 January 2010 at 11:14

    goodness, will someone please hand me a fan? ;-)

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  8. Crybbe66620 January 2010 at 12:09

    You had me with the race car, all the way through to the steamy, sexy ending. Very nice!!!

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  9. carolsnotebook20 January 2010 at 13:35

    Sexy and can fix a car?

    Loved it- very hot.

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  10. Percy Bisque Silley20 January 2010 at 15:04

    I apologize for my previous brief comment, which might be taken for rude except that my life was in grave peril at the time and it was all I'd time to utter.

    To elaborate: Lady, the smells in thy poem are not universally Cherished. And I would suppose the Churl's breath smelled of barley hops?

    May I suggest leaving the Bronx to travel abroad where you would be sure to find Gentlmen more couth - that is, less uncouth - than those in your immediate vicinity.

    Cheers,
    Percy

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  11. Bill20 January 2010 at 15:59

    Ideal? I'm not sure. But interesting, certainly.

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  12. Anonymous20 January 2010 at 18:37

    @ Percy

    :(, Creativity
    Shrinks Your Stature
    Simpleton Thoughts
    Raise Your Ego

    -Shiva

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  13. Uncouth oil stained overall20 January 2010 at 19:11

    Dark gaze Piercing soul
    Rouses dormant desires
    Then starts forever

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  14. Jeeves20 January 2010 at 20:48

    Interesting

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  15. Tumblewords:20 January 2010 at 20:55

    Ah, the wonder of it all. Nice!

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  16. Larry20 January 2010 at 22:12

    tell anthony yes I'm sure he'll fix my car, or at least get my motor running LOL.


    manic Monday

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  17. Ann (bunnygirl)20 January 2010 at 22:32

    This is a fun scene and I love how you put it into poetry.

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  18. Stan Ski20 January 2010 at 22:34

    Just proves that beauty really is in the eye of the beholder.

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  19. Americanising Desi20 January 2010 at 22:37

    it's all so ideal :D

    Uncountable

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  20. Jay Thurston21 January 2010 at 06:37

    This piece paints a vivid picture, great description of the scene and the passion as well!

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  21. Percy Bisque Silley21 January 2010 at 09:31

    Anon and Uncouth: Do tell Gautami I said "Hi..."

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  22. Just someone21 January 2010 at 16:13

    That was a great one..

    each one better than the one before; you are amazing

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  23. Uncouth oil stained overall21 January 2010 at 22:24

    I believe you already have...She speaks very highly of you turns out...

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  24. CJT22 January 2010 at 10:17

    I loved this, very sensual and passionate.

    Never Centered

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  25. Dee Martin22 January 2010 at 17:40

    whew - fanning self now. Now I'm wondering, just what was she reading?

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  26. Scott Clawson25 January 2010 at 20:09

    That's what I need! A race car! :-) Great read and good use of the 3WW, thanks for sharing it! :-)

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