Saturday, 16 January 2010
convulsions cause chaos
studiously she avoids gazing in that direction
where he sits nonchalant, almost uncaring-
minds send out signals; silence so chilling,
picking up vibrations, she answers the question
being very still, with almost no expression,
she slowly stands with her eyes measuring
the distance, she glides toward his beckoning
mind. her heart beat, was by any indication
making her state, an object of ardent desire;
visible in her stance, in her jerky mannerisms.
smoldering flame, blazing; intense, luminous
pulling him in too; each bursting vein on fire
blowing apart their semblance, volumes
of convulsions still unseen, causing chaos
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Now there's some chaos I could get down with!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Gautami for the foreplay...
A most sparkly relationship!
ReplyDeleteChaos certainly gets in the way sometimes.
ReplyDeleteit's like you feel comfortable yet there is still chaos-inhibitions...:)
ReplyDeletei like the poem Gautami...:)
keep up!
Bliss and passion, do not mix like bread and butter, love how you say it ;)
ReplyDeleteBrilliant take on the prompt.. You portray the emotions very strongly. A powerful work.
ReplyDeleteSizzling with chaotic passion! Lovely read.
ReplyDeleteDon't you just love Chaos!
ReplyDelete<3
emotional chaos -- but just like in science, an underlying pattern.
ReplyDeleteThis really touch me since I'm kind of in that situation right now...
ReplyDeleteI love the sense of overwhelming, silent attraction toward one another.
ReplyDeleteSparks flying, for sure!
ReplyDeleteAnd such is the flame of desire, especially when acceptance is unknown. Should I, or shouldn't I. Sometime you have to just open yourself to the possibility of disappointment and take the risk. Nice lead up to the chaos!
ReplyDeleteLove the movement from illusionary control to chaos of passion. Thank you for sharing this.
ReplyDeleteluv the idea of nonverbal conversations exchanged....
ReplyDeleteIf you try to hold your breath as you read, you can't get to the end of the sentence, but it kind of adds an exaggerated sense of chaos to the piece, which I thought was brilliant...
ReplyDeletei felt the chaos in her indecision unbearable. i'm glad she chose passion over constraint. You create a beautiful gathering storm.
ReplyDeleteOh Tami, that's hot hot hot. Very powerful. well done.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
Ardent, honest, real, beautiful. My kind of chaos, to be sure.
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