Wednesday, 21 October 2009

memories jive tirelessly

metallic blues jangles in the background
reckless me, jives tirelessly
dad, your words
move in and out
after countless years
silhouette within the walls
of memories jiggles
my heartache is contained
because you reinforced it that way
that speck of paper in my pocket
scented with your love
drives away my blues
metallic sheen of jangling bangles
makes me heart whole yet again


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21 comments:

  1. mark21 October 2009 at 07:40

    Quite the heart-warming ode to somebody dear.

    Well done...

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  2. ThomG21 October 2009 at 08:26

    I see no signs of slowing down. A lot of good lines in this, and it emits emotion like sparks.

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  3. Cricket21 October 2009 at 08:59

    very nice tribute - I wonder what is on the paper???

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  4. swapna21 October 2009 at 10:34

    Beautifully conveys the heartache and then the jangling bangles gathers the pieces together to make it whole again. Wonderful take on the prompt.

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  5. Sweetest in the Gale21 October 2009 at 12:09

    This was beautiful...that piece of paper must be very special. I'm glad it gives strength!

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  6. MichaelO21 October 2009 at 12:32

    Wise recitations echo in your heart, keeping your forward trajectory through life. Blessings.

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  7. Tumblewords:21 October 2009 at 15:23

    Strong words of nostalgia and heartache - Nice work!

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  8. b21 October 2009 at 16:11

    As always, beautiful.

    b

    http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2009/10/habit-of-thinking.html

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  9. Cynthia Short21 October 2009 at 16:17

    I love this, the way you used the J words so perfectly within the piece...very nice!

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  10. Zouxzoux21 October 2009 at 20:31

    "that speck of paper in my pocket
    scented with your love"

    a beautiful tribute to that special person.

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  11. Just someone21 October 2009 at 20:42

    This is as great as any!

    A beautiful piece:)

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  12. Ann (bunnygirl)21 October 2009 at 21:35

    I like the way you go back to the beginning and repeat the words, but with a twist. You've posed some questions here...

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  13. Rajlakshmi22 October 2009 at 03:13

    such a lovely piece... touching... the words are still echoing...very beautifully penned.

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  14. lissa22 October 2009 at 07:45

    a wonderful piece to remember someone by

    should it be "makes 'my' heart whole yet again" instead of "makes 'me' heart whole yet again"? not quite sure of this part, I guess I dont' like quite like reading "makes 'me' heart whole yet again", but it's just me

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  15. Bone22 October 2009 at 09:03

    Your words are always interesting, different. Never cliched.

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  16. Yellow Tulip22 October 2009 at 12:14

    :)...beautiful:)

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  17. ~willow~22 October 2009 at 15:03

    I'm curious about the speck of paper. :)

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  18. illyria taylor22 October 2009 at 17:52

    Gosh G, your bad stuff is just as good as your normal stuff. Gorgeous as usual

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  19. PS : De-abbreviate as you like ;)22 October 2009 at 22:09

    Simple but yet so touching !!

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  20. cyclopseven24 October 2009 at 05:07

    Poignant memories hallowed by love lasting ever. Nice.

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  21. Greyscale Territory24 October 2009 at 16:30

    Love the idea of memories jiving ~ like some frantic, endless dance ~ like the dervishes! Very graphic!

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