in that misted dawn
lantern of the sun
touches my skin
that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day
without your presence
that mildest of essence
sends me to a seance
out of my window
my visions lay low
towards the sea I bow
I feel more kisses, so light
from that first light
before it gets dazzling bright
my descent to the concrete
is a follow up for ascent to the sky
I need to get out of that attic more often
lantern of the sun
touches my skin
that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day
without your presence
that mildest of essence
sends me to a seance
out of my window
my visions lay low
towards the sea I bow
I feel more kisses, so light
from that first light
before it gets dazzling bright
my descent to the concrete
is a follow up for ascent to the sky
I need to get out of that attic more often
beautiful dear:)..enjoyed my read;)
ReplyDeleteAnother gem! How do you do it?!
ReplyDeleteAn original take on the prompt. I like it.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, visual and warm.
ReplyDeletei think a first kiss can transform one's life in ways unimaginable. and then, your ending spruced my thoughts in a new direction. great write. hope all is well.
ReplyDeleteGolly, now I know why I can't get up and out anymore. I am missing that catalytic kiss of my morning.
ReplyDeleteThis is cute. With the exception of the last verse your rhyme works well. Keeping those is hard with the short lines.
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I personally loved the connection between kisses and light. What a great thought! (Thank you for your opinion on which haiku.)
ReplyDeleteAll very pretty and romantic and light until that concrete (reality?) bites? A slight twist of irony?
ReplyDeleteLoved the rhyme and the essense of it. Beautiful take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteLight and kiss and hope....And survival out there. I enjoyed this very much.
ReplyDeleteI loved this poem...especially the last line, which made me smile.
ReplyDeleteThat first kiss is all it takes for a good day. Nice imagery too.
ReplyDelete:) wonderful first kiss!! a gem of a poem!
ReplyDeleteWow, so moving and bright, strange lol and beautiful
ReplyDeleteI love the image of the "lantern of the sun" Gautami! Also the idea of descending to start the day -- as if the night time were on a higher plane metaphorically as well as up in the attic!
ReplyDeleteIndeed the attic can clutter a person`s visions...loved your awakening.
ReplyDeleteThis poetry brought a smile at this end. Thank you.
ReplyDeletei need to spend more time here...
ReplyDeleteyour words remind me of morning prayer at dawn, as the first rays bathe the world...& how "re-entry" into the day's mundane can be jarring.
ReplyDeletesuch a grand first kiss~
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It's not good to stay in the attic - glad you can be freed by a kiss. Neat work!
ReplyDeleteLoved the first verse best, but it was all gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteAs always my friend, you make me reach out to poetry, which is not my thing, and I am happy for it.
ReplyDeleteI like this stanza:
ReplyDelete'that first kiss of the day
shows me the way
to face a day, any day'
As well as the way you wrap up the poem.
Liked the surprise ending to this - you always have such original ideas.
ReplyDeletenicely done--you always seem to have a "hook" at the end of your poems. I was also intrigued by the rhyme scheme--with all but the first and last verses rhyming.
ReplyDeleteA lovely surprise at the end. Very well done. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI love the way the rhyme falls apart at the end.
ReplyDeleteNicely done- very creative use of rhyme!
ReplyDeleteThat is beautiful!
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