Saturday, 1 August 2009

white curtains bellow from an open window

white curtains bellow from an open window

the villain has the hero cornered
who manages to escape out a window,
when the bad guy kicks the door
the drapes move wildly

the low streams of Brahms' cello
along with the wind whistling noisily
calms the atmosphere down to a reverie
while the veil ripples gently

white curtains anticipate police catching up soon


34 comments:

  1. Those windows are disclosing quite a crime.

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  2. Love the powerful use of the word "veil" and how it seems to come alive in the energy of the atmosphere!

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  3. You always take me somewhere unexpected, you're quite the thriller ;)

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  4. windows, the silent witness

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  5. I can see the scene playing on the television.

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  6. I imagine delicate, lovely curtains and a place of calm. The aggression taking place at the place really jars. Very effective.

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  7. I loved how you made the white curtains a major character in this adventure. You really brought them to life, and that is such a unique perspective. Loved it!

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  8. bollywood movie from a Curtains perspective, very innovative....

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  9. I could see these windows on my tv and I think the idea of the curtains being a witness to the crime is neat.

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  10. interesting point of view, these curtains can tell a story, much like a person

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  11. tells a compelling story with strong images.

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  12. You have painted the scene wonderfully with your words. I love the billowing curtains.

    Spirithelpers

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  13. Effective and interesting take on the prompt. What the window and curtains could tell the police. Wow.

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  14. what an imaginative take on the prompt. your words are so full of life and movement!

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  15. Interesting take on the prompt. Remind me of a lot of tv shows ... where the window is the star.

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  16. Very interesting - love the images. The white curtains do not end up being surrunder, but instead escapte. Nice twist.

    JP/deb

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  17. But maybe the window is just a decoy,
    The villain poised behind the door,
    Ready to pounce.

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  18. An interesting scene you've set here!

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  19. what a scene! i love how you play music into this :)

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  20. Wonderful writing! So easy to visualize :)

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  21. Boy, you can really create atmosphere! Love this!

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  22. Rear Window, I see it in black and white, engaging all the senses.

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  23. a most delightful piece g... who knew bad guy, windows and billowing curtains could be...

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  24. Oh I like this~ very visual and storytelling-ish. Wonder what happened next?
    Thanks for the birthday wishes for my daughter- she loved reading your comment!

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  25. I am smiling at this escapade in words! Super job!

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  26. A great one to stimulate one's imagination!

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  27. Hi G.T, I like it! "There will be a brief intermission, please ..."
    ..

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  28. like a movie plot:)

    I like the white curtains waiting for the police line:)

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