I dip the spoon into the coagulated milk
and let out coarse curses
I rant like a diode gone wrong
static of the radio bustles at me
your salacious sagas bore me to death
I run away and hitch a ride
and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past
I am homeward bound
enjoying the ride in that 8-track road
elocution of my joy akin to froth
Good poem GT.The secret is in the 7 minutes.
ReplyDeletePowerful and a good combination of the words.
ReplyDeleteNothing pisses me more off than cream gone bad in my coffee, I relate lol love the rant here ;)
ReplyDeleteanother winner...7 minutes, huh? Mine took 7 DAYS and is not nearly as good...
ReplyDeleteI love that last line! It so perfectly draws a picture the joy!
ReplyDeleteHello Gautami,
ReplyDeleteThis story works! I like "and think of the fling I had long ago
now leaving behind another rancid past"
This is very good Gautami!
ReplyDeleteI love how this poem intrigues; it balances on the fine edge of my not understanding it (which is NOT a bad thig at all). Rather, it tempts me with another view, a different world, raises poetic questions...
ReplyDeleteI'm amazed at how different people's poems can be using a similar set of words (even some not specified). So many great stories, including yours. Glad to discover your blog too.
ReplyDeleteYou really do a great job with this week's words!
ReplyDeleteLove the sound of "let out coarse curses"
ReplyDeleteI agree with Deborah that I'm not sure if I completely grasp it, but the sounds are lovely and it draws me in.
gautami your brevity works well with this poem, short bursts that place the reader on the side of the narrator. the challenge words couple nicely with the subject matter. -lawrence
ReplyDeleteNice write of the words.. and done so quickly.
ReplyDeleteAll those words - combined to great effect.
ReplyDeleteI'm pleased with the title you chose -- it's my favorite line ... I love the energy in it, and in the poem.
ReplyDeleteMy god. U spinned a nice one here. Like a story
ReplyDeleteThis one might have been over my head, but I just couldn't get the significance of the italicised words. Did I miss something? Probably. I liked it anyway.
ReplyDeleteOk, I get the exercise now. I commented too soon!
ReplyDeleteFrom Therese B. at RWP -- coarse curses from coagulated milk -- I can hear them now.
ReplyDeleteMy favourite line here has to be "enjoying the ride in that 8-track road". Good use of the words here. I like.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
oh, my!
ReplyDeleteI have done this myself, although not with the 8-track playing.
great work!
good one for sure...again...7 mins are good. I often write in 7 mins or ......but usually cary arround in my head for hours ...days...months or many years.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely great poetry. I loved the use of salacious, 8-track and froth. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful thing your words created. Thanks so much
ReplyDeleteI love "salacious sagas." Good use of the words throughout. I like how the anger seems to cool when the speaker hits the road.
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