that pale blue vase
made with expertise
captured her essence
when I held it in my hands
I missed her terribly
last masterpiece of his
helped me break his head
that vase qualifying as a weapon
was only a fitting tribute
for all she had suffered
jinxed it might have been for him
when he made that vase,
coloured it blue
fired from her calcified remains
from his own furnace
my revenge being complete
I filled it with daffodils and crocuses
cherishing her memories
when he made that vase,
ReplyDeletecoloured it blue
fired from her calcified remains
Delicious :-)
Wow, dark and brooding. I like this very much.
ReplyDeleteI love the darkness in this. It's bitter and sweet
ReplyDeleteThe mind of a pessimist and the Soul of an artist, you are unbelievably talented!
ReplyDeleteI loved the ending it is very .... final, it brings closure (for me at least) for the vase it's self.
ReplyDeleteLovely.
Now that was a useful vase/urn. Sinister coupled with bit of retribution. Great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteworks well for carry on tuesday too!
ReplyDeleteDark, biting and sharp...wonderful read!
ReplyDeleteWow...well done.
ReplyDeletea masterpiece!
ReplyDeletebravo!
http://fart-in-a-jar.blogspot.com/2009/08/confused.html
Absolutely marvellous! Sinister and dark yet it brough a hint of a smile to my face!
ReplyDeleteI adore revenge!
ReplyDeleteFired from her calcified remains - eerie...
ReplyDeleteDark, but then revenge is sweet!
Sweet,sweet revenge...dark and ironic...brilliant!
ReplyDeleteLike this!! Not vengeful, but I can think it LOL! Great writing :)
ReplyDeleteThe vase hold the mean for his end. Hope it is not real:). Good piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem. I feel as though some frustrations were released while still remembering the loved one in a kind way. Hope all is well. Have a great night.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very dark piece. Wow. It reminded me of Devil in the White City, especially the furnace.
ReplyDelete*shuddering*
Great writing and story telling!
Nice work. Love and revenge together..
ReplyDeleteDark and lovely
ReplyDeleteExcellent - thanks for sharing...
ReplyDelete--SoC
Such an innocent-sounding item, yet so sinister. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI'm afraid...I'm very afraid.
ReplyDeletedark! very dark!
ReplyDeleteliked the first verse a lot...
:)
One Big Happy Family
wow! I love the way the prompt words all tied this together.
ReplyDeleteJinx is a hard word and in this it makes perfect sense.
happy 3WW!
holy moly... that was dark and a bit creepy. fun to read outloud, slowly.
ReplyDeleteGautami - re: 3:15, you can join us any time! You don't have to do the whole month. :-)