Saturday, 3 January 2009

frenzied entropies

trying to taste coffee from your lips
I stop space and time with a kiss-
eroding all the rules of diplomacy
with madness and neurotic honesty

coaxing our flesh to confess
what our words never dare profess
simmering, shivering, reckless kiss
igniting arson between our hips’

inciting the surface of our skin
frenzied entropies lurks within,
catastrophe of emotions and thoughts
which alternatively distort and contort

we unwittingly undrape deceits,
writhing under the silken sheets.
molten tongues, roving palms
yielding to contagion of giddy charms

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And don't forget to join the poetry train this Monday.

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43 comments:

  1. Devika3 January 2009 at 22:29

    good one..
    Enjoyed Gautami,

    Wish you a Happy and Prosperous New Year :)

    devika

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  2. Beth P.3 January 2009 at 23:17

    yowsers, Gautami--
    made me hot and bothered just reading it!

    Happy skin...I mean new year...to you!

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  3. maekitso3 January 2009 at 23:37

    Hi Gautami. Great passion and energy in this poem. How have you been? Looks like you are keeping yourself very busy with the Poetry Train, and it looks like you're doing a fine job with it too. I've enjoyed dropping in here and reading your poetry during the last year. Hope the new one is a good one for you.

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  4. Jeeves4 January 2009 at 01:15

    "yielding to contagion of giddy charms". Ohh, that is passionate. Nice one.

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  5. anthonynorth4 January 2009 at 02:24

    Passion indeed. Must go and cool off now! :-)

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  6. SandyCarlson4 January 2009 at 03:24

    What else to do but yield? Too much warmth to resist.

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  7. venus664 January 2009 at 04:31

    Very passionate. Happy New Year to you. An award for you at my blog.

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  8. Whitesnake4 January 2009 at 08:36

    I am so glad I am wearing baggy pants.............

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  9. Amias4 January 2009 at 09:04

    Hot ... to say the least! I enjoyed this.

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  10. Susan Helene Gottfried4 January 2009 at 09:15

    I got stuck with the first line... it spun me off into an outtake!

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  11. polona4 January 2009 at 09:30

    wow. you have drawn me in a vortex of passion.

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  12. Deborah Godin4 January 2009 at 09:33

    Wooh! I think if I went out and read your poem to the lake, the icepack would thaw! Well done!

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  13. spacedlaw4 January 2009 at 10:14

    Hot, hot, hot!
    Nicely done.

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  14. if4 January 2009 at 10:21

    summer time...skin time...good!

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  15. Ken Wagner4 January 2009 at 10:29

    It's tough to pull off a poem like this, but you make it seem easy.

    I especially like -

    "simmering, shivering"
    and
    "frenzied entropies"

    Entropy - from the physical sciences - has such rich possibilities when applied to human love.

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  16. Sioux4 January 2009 at 10:53

    Very well written!

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  17. Fledgling Poet4 January 2009 at 15:04

    What a beautifully sensual poem...such vivid imagery!

    Thanks for mentioning the Poetry Train -- I have a brand new poem I can submit tomorrow.

    Happy 2009 to you~~ :~)

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  18. Bear4 January 2009 at 15:32

    Very touching...

    I love the use of entropy and the notions it conjures up.

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  19. floreta4 January 2009 at 16:27

    wow! i loved this.. my favorite one yet from you that i've seen so far :) i don't usually like poetry that rhymes.. but i really loved this.

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  20. Pam4 January 2009 at 17:14

    You can feel the chemical reaction in this poem. Love that you chose to use the word "entropes".

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  21. J. Andrew Lockhart4 January 2009 at 20:59

    WOW! The 1st line! I'm a huge coffee drinker, so it gets my attention. :)

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  22. Ghost Particle4 January 2009 at 23:00

    very nice...ive read it for 3 days now.

    ok where are you!!!!??? grrrr...

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  23. SweetTalkingGuy5 January 2009 at 00:17

    Coffee lips, love it! Okay it's a date, as long as you put me on the blogroll at MPTRevisited!
    Only joking! perhaps?

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  24. fourwindshaiga5 January 2009 at 03:58

    Wow!

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  25. watermaid5 January 2009 at 06:26

    Entropy is one of my favourite concepts.

    Could you please add me to the poetry train blogroll?

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  26. Julia Smith5 January 2009 at 08:11

    Oh, Gautami - there are so many gems here.

    'coaxing our flesh to confess'

    'catastrophe of emotions and thoughts'

    'yielding to contagion of giddy charms'

    Love all of it!

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  27. Quiet Paths5 January 2009 at 10:39

    whew! I wonder when my mister will get home? *thanks a lot. No really.

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  28. Tumblewords:5 January 2009 at 12:25

    WooHoo! This one's good to go! Passionate, definitely. Neurotic honesty brings it home - great, great work!

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  29. nairobi5 January 2009 at 15:16

    gee that was a passionate one!
    phew !

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  30. angie5 January 2009 at 17:23

    Oh, my Gautami!

    Is it hot in here or is it just me?

    That was wonderful--love the coffee lips!

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  31. Linda Jacobs5 January 2009 at 18:17

    I'm heading to a cold shower after reading this poem!

    Love it!

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  32. DeLi6 January 2009 at 01:10

    i feel that passion too, the frenzy, the nectar of coffee lips...what a post to read and enjoy this 2009 :)

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  33. Danika / OpenChannel6 January 2009 at 02:35

    igniting arson between our hips!

    Wow, Gautami, what have you been up to lately?

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  34. Leatherdykeuk6 January 2009 at 07:14

    What a fabulous rhythm :)

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  35. Borut6 January 2009 at 09:17

    Hem,'we unwittingly undrape deceits'.Practice makes perfect!?:)

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  36. zoya gautam6 January 2009 at 11:08

    .."Entropy - from the physical sciences - has such rich possibilities when applied to human love"..for sharing this many thanks..

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  37. Patois6 January 2009 at 11:11

    Definitely a wonderful rhythm and so very hot, hot, hot.

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  38. sage6 January 2009 at 13:51

    Arson between hips? WOW

    Nicely done, Gautami!

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  39. one more believer7 January 2009 at 15:36

    cannot help but to think of tom hanks when he was on that island alone after crashing from the fedex plane and he screamed "fire, i made fire"....

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  40. Donn Coppens7 January 2009 at 18:09

    Holy Frenzied Entropies Batman!

    Hmmm...that is a nice fit because unexpected changes do tend to average out the differences in people.

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  41. Linda - Nickers and Ink8 January 2009 at 05:02

    Steamy one . . . igniting arson. Whew.


    Happy New Year.

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  42. Bonnie K9 January 2009 at 07:45

    Wow two very different poems and I was able to relate to both. Sad to feel that tension of the first but it was great to move to powerful romance of the second.
    Wonderful work,
    Bonnie

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  43. Beaman9 January 2009 at 16:28

    I must admit, I am very fond of rhyming poetry, as you can probably tell from my own work. This poem as well as being very sexy suits both worlds.

    I am dating an Indian girl at the moment too. :-p

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