Wednesday, 28 January 2009

digging doggedly

ruthless icicles in the deep freeze
caress other water molecules
which coalesce into each other

jagged ice act like sharp knives
digging doggedly into the edges
of molten space of my silence

psychedelic colours of which can
permeate some unknown vacuum
dreams dance their way through it

each jagged step ruthlessly caress
ramifications of which i know not
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18 comments:

  1. ThomG28 January 2009 at 05:56

    I like it. It is thought-provoking and the images are fresh and crisp.

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  2. Rose Dewy Knickers28 January 2009 at 06:09

    Brings shivers to me. It's been cold here the past week although warm today again.

    I like the 'taste' of this poem.

    Rose

    xo

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  3. Marianne H. Nielsen28 January 2009 at 06:14

    It's a great poem, love the 'digging doggedly' feel of those words.

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  4. floreta28 January 2009 at 07:14

    i like it! i like how you've made personalities out of the ice, water molecules, icicles, etc. great use of words.

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  5. venus6628 January 2009 at 07:16

    Words are beautifully woven.

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  6. Jeeves28 January 2009 at 07:21

    Molten space!!!!Nice one!!!!

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  7. anthonynorth28 January 2009 at 07:29

    Rich in imagery. Wonderful.

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  8. Lorraine28 January 2009 at 07:42

    I enjoyed this very much, it's chilling but compassionate...and thanks for not being angry at my comment :)

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  9. Noah the Great28 January 2009 at 08:59

    Good work!

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  10. Pretty Me!!28 January 2009 at 10:39

    amusing... u take the readers deep...

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  11. Tumblewords:28 January 2009 at 11:16

    Nice movement from ice to dreams and back...

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  12. Fledgling Poet29 January 2009 at 06:49

    We both wrote about icicles...how 'cool'. :P

    Your imagery was crystal clear...

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  13. polona29 January 2009 at 10:32

    you certainly have a uique way of seeing things...

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  14. Sweet Talking Guy..29 January 2009 at 12:14

    I like the idea of dreams dancing!

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  15. Linda Jacobs29 January 2009 at 16:00

    I like how you use each word twice! I had a hard time getting "ruthless" in even once!

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  16. Pam29 January 2009 at 16:22

    This poem has wonderful images. I really liked the sudden lines about light and how well it relates to the rest of the images in the poem.

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  17. angie29 January 2009 at 17:17

    Great piece!
    Love the "frozen" images!

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  18. one more believer31 January 2009 at 13:00

    cannot help but to compare... looking out a window watching long icicles slowing melt drenching the ground below... love "...the ramifications of which i do not know.."

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