on crumpled piece of paperwith a crayon, I sketch you-
no adornment in your ears,
eyes filled with laughter-
your hair pushed behind
the ears, you look almost
demure, your full lower
lip belying that fact. In
simplicity, beauty of your
soul is reflected in your face.
I see you running towards me
falling onto me, holding me
tight. I crush that paper
throwing it into the bin.
"I would rather keep you
within my heart, now
that you are gone forever"
Photo credits: http://www.elfwood.com/art/h/a/hanson/laughter.jpg.html
the ending was a surprise to me.... wonderful work
ReplyDeleteI loved it ...
ReplyDeleteHope you are well ...
You draw very well, very very well :D
ReplyDeleteWith no adornment she still looks great with her smile!
wait, i thought you drew that, my apologies, too early in the morning for me
ReplyDeleteHeartfelt and powerful. Thanks!
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You have captured deep love and love lost fully.
ReplyDeleteWonderful.
ReplyDeleteOh, how tragic! Leaves me wondering if it was your first break up or a death.
ReplyDeleteSad, but very nice!
ReplyDeleteOh, yeah. I know that pain.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of the few times I think I'm lucky I can't draw.
kind of sad but very sentimental and sweet
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and touching.
ReplyDeleteVery moving and powerfully written. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful picture and powerful words.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing.
this is very moving, and beautiful. i know that feeling, but sometimes, i do try to sketch.
ReplyDeleteSpeaks of pure love and loss at the same time. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes! I am definately challenged in that area! Especially so early in the day! Lol
Beautiful sketch and poem. Yes, the ending was a surprise. Thanks, as always, for sharing.
ReplyDeleteAh, the ability to remember laughter is indeed precious!
ReplyDeletevery beautiful and moving
ReplyDeletebeautiful
ReplyDeletelove it:)
Beautifully put as only you can.
ReplyDeletestill lines
ReplyDeletebut not without
unpredictable
mood-swings
parabolic and hyperbolic
trajectories
sometimes tangent
at other times
dots in a straight line..
searching
for what is
or what is not..!
hi gautami../z.g.
That is very sad.
ReplyDeleteSo ironic that remembering her laughter brings you sadness . . .
Wow. Laughter and sorrow mixed. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful prose poem, gautami! I love it! And yes you did succeed!
ReplyDeleteAt first, I'm so happy, and then I'm so sad. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteJust beautiful and poignant!
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness. There was not a clue that this would end so sadly. I am stunned, with a few tears. I hope to be remembered like this, though. I want to yell, grab the paper out of the trash: don't do that! You'll regret this later!
ReplyDeleteunexpected & powerful words!
ReplyDeleteA great prose poem--and yes, I agree, the ending is superb!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteohh, that is so good!!... the good and bad of love written well..
ReplyDeleteWow, very powerful capturing the feelings well.
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