Sheilagh lee said wonderfully inventive love the line tragic illuion.
I guess the result of tragic illusion is nothing to the wrath of a woman scorned...
One realises that illusion is tragic only after reality expresses itself..and often years pass through..Thanks Gautami for visiting my page.. it is emboldening,,
Love your shardoma!~laurie
I love how you can put so much into so few words. It's wonderful.
Ah, illusion is often tragic, isn't it?
This is a wonderful Shadorma poem. I've seen a few this week and tried my own today too.Very very well written.
Sad, so sad! I've never seen this form before but I like it!
i can relate !!!I love this poem
You got the three little words in nicely!<3
Lovely lines dear... sad but so intense! Thanks for visiting my space.Hey, do come by blog today (Thursday)… I’m having a meet up party that’s intended to boost us bloggers’ networking. I hope to see you there…It’s @ http://the-perfect-line.blogspot.com/2011/04/gear-up-people-its-friends-meetup-party.htmlConsider this a formal invitation :)
Sad unrequited love is always a poignant read. This is a really beautiful piece.
Well done...I will agree with others by saying I, too, liked how you used the three words...and in such a compact piece. Yay for you!!! :)
Very well written pieces.thanks for stopping by my blog as well.LisaInspiredbyLisa
Ah, I get now what a a shadorma poem is, the amounts of syllables. It has a really natural flow. I once had concrete emotions, a passing thing in my early 20s, everthing felt "flattened" for a while, if you get what I mean. But by mid-20s all was smooth sailing, and has remained so -- must've been finding true love at last.xoxo
Nice poem. Bear up and try again, it might come better next time.
Interesting form - shadorma; 'Tragic illusion' - liked that one - hv to agree with the others earlier
There are so many ways for a soul to be drained..Jae
this is creative.love the last part.