Sunday, 13 March 2011

unknown gap

some thing flutters
I watch wings unfold
midnight blue resonates

slide of it is a tribute
to the earthy feel
of scented surroundings

my feet fall into big gap

24 comments:

  1. the first part makes me think og butterflies....

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  2. cool imagery, Happy Sunday.
    :)

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  3. Spring blooms come to mind. Great Sunday 160. Thanks for playing again this week.

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  4. I could only think of dreams here... cuz my mind drifts into such gaps in dreams... in and out.. in and out.. :)
    Vivid and beautiful, Gautami!

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  5. Oh, you've been to the Bad Lands too? :)

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  6. I find 'slide' a rather uncomfortable way of expressing a silk or satin smoothness... It's a bit too close the the recent images of earthquake/landslips...

    How about something like
    'its whisper is a tribute' because silk whispers, and also gives an impression od sliding?

    Hope you don't mind my suggesting a re-think? The butterfly image works well with midnight...

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  7. That last line is intriguing and a bit scary. This is a thinker, which I like very much.

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  8. The fluttering thing is not a butterfly....and there is nothing silken in here....at least not when I wrote it. If it got converted after I posted, then I don't know anything about that...

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  9. I watch wings unfold
    midnight blue resonates ... ooh just lovely!

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  10. All those wonderful feelings..makes it worth taking that step..Jae

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  11. nice.. here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/27/cheesecake/

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  12. Fantastic images cascade my mind! Great write!

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  13. Your use of English is interesting, idiosyncratic.

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  14. The fall took me by surprise; I was too busy staring at the butterfly.
    My Blog

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  15. The unusual word configuration of this poem allows each of us to read our own interpretation into it.

    I saw the curiosity in something beautiful leading me to danger! Intriguing post.

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  16. Love the line 'midnight blue resonates' I'm a midnight person too!

    <3

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  17. Your gap remains unknown to me but I enjoyed your poem that had people thinking of butterflies, dreams, blooms, etc...

    Thank you for sharing your link with me.

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  18. Cool poem - provides some structure and guidance, but it is up to us to figure out what it is.

    Thanks!

    Meryl
    http://departingthetext.blogspot.com

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  19. Like others, I'm seeing beauty and delicacy here, G. This is lovely, precise, and small. I just want to watch it alight on my hand, afraid to breathe lest it leave.

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  20. calm imagery here, in your wings..! :) liked it.

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