Monday 27 December 2010

patching up...last line first line

patches in snatches

patches of sunlight
I try to gather
in my palm locking all in my fingers

I also gather beads
thread them with wires of sunlight
enclosing the warmth

those snatches of wind
(fancy those!)
I collect in my hand towel

in the upcoming days of drought
I will take all of these out
and fill my emptiness

"can anyone hold transient nostalgia?"

I look the last line of the poem above, patches in snatches, and made that the first line in the poem below and let it go wherever it wanted to, all by itself.

patching up

can anyone hold transient nostalgia?
Is it not an absurd concept
dancing inside one's head

if forks toppled over
spoons held their head high
bowl of dough mixed so well

but why talk of mundane
in the midst of all this?
dancing thoughts can have a pattern

"let it sit for a while, I will find a way 
out of nostalgia, absurd or not"

23 comments:

  1. All the best in the new year, Gautami. A season for nostalgia, transient or not.

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  2. And it reached .. all by itself..
    Very beautifully weaved.. Gautami!!!

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  3. Nostalgia. I love taht word and what it brings to my mind and heart. great post
    :)

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  4. Lovely writing - keep doing what you are doing because it is working :)

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  5. How wonderful! I love reading your poems. Have a great new year!

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  6. Love the title of the first poem!

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  7. Hope and Sunshine make life a beautiful dance..thanks for both weaving thoughts of what was into what is and picturing what will be.
    Lovely, thanks. Gay

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  8. Enjoyed both poems and the questions which the lines explore. Very nice writing.

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  9. And the pattern can make a poem that gathers sunlight to warm nostalgia. I really like both poems Gautami. They stand separately, but go well together. I enjoyed this prompt, and think you did the same,

    Elizabeth

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  10. Gautami, nicely done. I believe we all live in nostalgia, it's comfortable.
    Regards,
    Don

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  11. Gautami nicely crafted. Nostalgia is something we all hold in our hearts.
    A happy New Year to you.
    Pamela

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  12. Yes, I liked both poems very much! Nice work!

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  13. nice. i really enjoyed both...and the questions you ponder...all teh best in the new year...

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  14. I think we all gather such things.
    Nice One Shot, Gautami.

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  15. there is something about your writing that makes me tremble..smile and absolutely relate to it. And yes, Nostalgia is that powerful girl..MESMERIZING Gautami :)

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  16. Enjoyed both poems. The words just danced along.

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  17. Wonderful work. I felt light and plaful just reading them. thank you.

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  18. Elizabeth is right: these two poems are inseperable companions. I love the idea of dancing thoughts.

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  19. Interesting..liked the pattern you have worked with ..nice

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  20. Very thought-provoking. It invites reading again and again. Nice. And I really like the title of the first poem.

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  21. Writing 'par excellence.' I think we have to collect everything we can when we can ... so we have it available during the upcoming days of drought! Have a happy new year!

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  22. Superb work - images and theme work perfectly together.

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