Sunday 28 November 2010

ripples

ripples in that lake
brush our shadows
sharp edges of rock
deflect light
moving sun melds
showing you and me
in throes of passion

"come feel my inner strength"

28 comments:

  1. You've captured a moment so beautifully with your words.

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  2. oh...quite intimate....like that last line....

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  3. oh la la - this is quite a moment in time..nice

    my 160

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  4. awesome read..
    lovely imagery on your 160.

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  5. Excellent imagery! I'm impressed!

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  6. Indeed inner strength is what matter.. very well weaved..

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  7. Awesome imagination...
    Brilliant poem...I love it :)

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  8. beautifully written. loved this so much. you are amazing ;0)

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  9. Lovely imagery and a great idea well woven. Can see the strength of your poem here.

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  10. Your imagery is lovely, and you conveyed a moment so clearly in so few words. Beautifully written. Kat

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  11. What a lovely picture you draw with this Sunday 160. Thanks for playing and sharing your great talent.

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  12. Wow how can so much be said in just 160...
    hummmmmm

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  13. Your choice of verbs really brings life to this poem. Well done.

    http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/11/28/sunday-160-to-awaken/

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  14. You paint a perfect picture of a day to be envied. Nice 160

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  15. A perfect day, recounted with beauty.

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  16. Love the way you have the light and water working for a beautiful effect in your poem - nice!!!

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  17. Beautiful, passionate, and stunning. Lovely poem.

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  18. the passion of strength rippling on the waters.. as the undertoe soothes one's way... love the simplicity of this lovely poem..

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  19. sounding so romantic I can see the sunsetting with the sillouhette of two lovers.....

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  20. What a beautiful picture your words paint...lovely interpretaion of the prompt.

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  21. Lovely poem.
    I took away my first attempt at this, in case you tried to visit my post and found that it was not accessable. But it's working now. I have finally finished writing a Centus for week 30.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's SC wk 30

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  22. That's beautiful Gautami! I would have not known it was Aries had you not mentioned it to me though.

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  23. Beautiful imagery. Lovely evocative words. Thank you.

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