Tuesday, 2 November 2010

bits and pieces

if you check through carefully
you will find scattered pieces
all over your house.
they belong to me
a tarnished coin
(you had picked it for me from a roadside)
a roll of scotch tape
(almost finished),
a tiny pair of scissors
(you clipped your nails with that)
half finished bar of soap
(that lavender scent drove you crazy)
a chipped mug with my zodiac sign
(Aries love the Ram!)
torn piece of a tissue with my poetry
(a mushy love poetry, I cringe I wrote that)

"I want those all, along with the chunk of me
that you never realized you had"

24 comments:

  1. Strong poem. The ending carries a punch.

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  2. What a breakup! We'd be surprised to know how much of ourselves we leave with others.

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  3. wow. all the shrapnel left laying in the after, with the incomplete heart...

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  4. Ouch.....this is poignant and real.

    Good poem....close to the bone.

    Lady Nyo

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  5. It's the little things that get to us.

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  6. Dear Gautami
    I relate with this so much... its painful to let go, when all the things around you are attached still with some one you love...and still need it to be loved...
    Good one.

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  7. Everyone who's read this now has a piece of you. (Thank you for sharing yourself!) Nice One Shot!

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  8. Great collection, sad and funny. If life weren't absurd we would live broken-hearted

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  9. phenomenal poem! the last line delivers more than I could want from a read!

    wonderful...

    Annie

    http://itslovelyannie.com/2010/11/02/there-is-no-place/

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  10. Your collection is more of thoughts and memories than of tangible things. Beautifully expressed.

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  11. ahh...but will you ever get all of that back ?

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  12. this was heart felt...loved the read..cheers pete

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  13. excellently expressed, great one shot!

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  14. Oh, the love poems are getting to me today. This was beautiful in its simple ties to honest and sincere love. Everything we touch leaves a bit of us behind.

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  15. You shared more than just bits and pieces with us it was nice getting to know you!

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  16. Gautami,
    A sad poem with a very hard-hitting end.
    Pamela

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  17. Good images, flippy end lines.

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  18. empowering departure is always the best revenge... ohhhh, did i say revenge... ouch!!! it musta slipped... a recollection

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  19. Did a bomb go off at your place?

    WOW!

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  20. Really enjoyed this one, Gautami. I've often experienced those reminders. Sometimes they're sweet, sometimes cruel

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  21. It's amazing how much you collect of another person, and you don't realise how much you have until you lose that person. All the little things...

    Nicole

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