Tuesday 16 November 2010

foregone and forgotten

night hour makes a mockery
of forgotten wisdom
resident death within life
is an ancient inevitability
(we forget that in the quest of immortality)
I pour divine wine
into a receptacle of floating waves
know this.... 
In my younger and more vulnerable years
I also gave my blood
which mingled with the earth

"violet of violence somehow fills the void"

39 comments:

  1. a universal truth.
    beautiful and painful,
    Di

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  2. I see ya caught with ya pants down yet again!

    Always the dark side....You don't know Darth do ya?

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  3. "resident death within life" - such a somber thought! I think perhaps sometimes forgetting is good.

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  4. Precise word choices and short line breaks made this shine. Excellent.

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  5. "I also gave my blood
    which mingled with the earth" - what imagery in those lines!

    Powerful writing.

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  6. This is such a great poem. I really love the powerful ending.

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  7. I liked this. It makes me want to know more of the story.

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  8. 'forgotten wisdom' sad when it happens..

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  9. I pour divine wine
    into a receptacle of floating waves
    know this....
    In my younger and more vulnerable years
    I also gave my blood
    which mingled with the earth
    -absolutely fabulous, good imagery and positive truth

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  10. "I also gave my blood
    which mingled with the earth"

    my favourite lines that tie it together

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  11. As always...Fantastic.
    Such a powerful writer you are.

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  12. Some dark poems have come out of this wordle. Yours is excellent.

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  13. The simplicity of the word choice doesn't obscure the profundity of the thoughts.....beautiful.

    Simplicity is the key here, I think.

    Lady Nyo

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  14. Excellent work. As Viv said, so many dark poems appeared out of these words. Or maybe it is the season, as it gets dark sooo much earlier now. (here)

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  15. you know that last line is intriguing in light of the context...i will mull over that one today...

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  16. Wow, so beautiful Gautami.
    Pamela

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  17. I think the almost matter-of-factness about dealth makes this one even more eerie.

    (Pour me another glass of that divine wine, will you please?)

    Nice One Shot, Gautami!

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  18. divine wine and blood, which mingles with the earth - this is strong

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  19. This is most appropriate for this time of year.

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  20. a bit of mystery here, as befits a poem with that touches on night, death, blood-letting...

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  21. Neat job of turning Nicole's words into your own. I really like pouring the wine "into a receptacle of floating waves".

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  22. You inspire , you enchant and yet you are a brilliance beyond par :)

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  23. This is beautiful; a sentimental write to me.. :)
    Thanks for dropping by and hope to see you around.. Glad to know you through our write.. :)

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  24. Oh, yes. When young, we often believe in our own immortality, only to be taken aback when reality strikes. Nice.

    Thanks for visiting my entry.

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  25. Intriguing. I love all the interpretations of Carry on Tuesday prompts.

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  26. Dear Gautami
    Its beautiful verse and emotional. The imagery is perfect. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing..


    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  27. a glass of wine
    poured into the sea
    my echoes

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  28. Dear Gautaumi: Beautiful! The flow of the written words comes so naturally to you! It is a joy to read your words!

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  29. Lots to enjoy in this, Gautami! The inevitability of death that we strive to forget, the divine wine, the blood mingling. All good!

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  30. Agreed with vivinfrance...you've outstripped me in darkness this week, with some excellent usage of the prompt words to create your imagery.

    -Nicole

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  31. You manage to say a lot without using a lot of extra words. Good job!

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  32. Images of the thoughts experienced in the middle of the night.

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  33. Your images paint a picture, complex ans mysterious-- nicely done!

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  34. love the parallel of divine wine and blood, and the sacrifice of it all. beautiful.

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  35. as always...a wonderful write...very clever...pete

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  36. Very clever and thought provoking. Enjoyed your use of language -- pouring "divine wine" and "blood" mingling with the earth... very nicely done.

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