Sunday 29 August 2010

curling & uncurling

she sews holes
but the wholes never come into being

purple juice of grapes
spurt from her lips; stain her pristine dress

she outlines it lovingly
her doubts reflect in the walled mirror

faith is so fragile
hence she has no use of it now, nor ever

her feet disappear in water
her head sways sideways and upwards

I uncurl my mind around her-
I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.

24 comments:

  1. The last line was so strong - left me feeling sad yet I could slo feel the strength and resilience of the voice..Jae

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  2. I love the first two lines, "she sews holes..." Lovely, quite visually evocative.

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  3. Really like the whole of this poem. Especially the line about uncurling mind around her, and makes the last line even more emphatic.

    Elizabeth

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  4. I love this..."I know I stand in line."

    b

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  5. Powerful words & imagery. I loved the last line, too, and wondered if ...I am not the only one...could be deleted for the most powerful...I stand in line...just a thought...

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  6. i love the first two lines - sewing holes - creates that hopeless feeling - but so beautiful

    mine is here

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  7. I liked it. made me sad and pensive. but that is what good poetry does...makes you think and I know the world is not always happy.

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  8. You always end the poem with a line that lingers in mind for a long time..excellent..

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  9. I love the thinking behind this poem, and the use of holes/wholes.
    Last line great.

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  10. gautami this is a beautiful piece!
    Pamela

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  11. This was an excellent use of the cot prompt. I enjoyed the way it made me ponder. Thank you for sharing.

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  12. How I love your poetry Gautami.
    Lovely to see that you are still writing here.
    hugs for you

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  13. faith is so fragile
    hence she has no use of it now, nor ever


    Sadly beautiful all the way through.

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  14. excellent poem! the last line stays in your head, really lingers. thanks for posting!

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  15. oplI like this one also glad you stopped by and left your comment I appreciate them very much ... Larry

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  16. Very powerful, especially the ending. Good Job

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  17. I read this again and again and I wonder. Thank you.

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  18. you have a beautiful opening,
    very smooth flow,
    divine job!

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  19. I am not the only one. I know I stand in line.
    nice ending Cheers!!!

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  20. I love the flow of your poem, it is great, thank for sharing it=D

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  21. Great opening. I need to read it again.

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  22. Oh absolutely, Gautami! We are all in that line.. deeds/mistakes/reactions/love/faith are all part of life.. and eventually, we reflect - curling and uncurling indeed!
    Beautifully portrayed! I enjoyed the wordplay here.. very stylishly played!

    Thanks for sharing this fine poem with poetry potluck...it's a pleasure to have you here!

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