Saturday, 10 July 2010

hugging the stones, I meditate fervently

my axis has broken
after spinning for so long
on the ground that I lie now
I hug the stones close
meditate fervently for my love

my covert glances cannot hide
my overt hunger for you-
when did I manage to lose
the treasure in the moss-
my palms tried to enclose it

wrapping it up did not help
you escaped through the gaps
between my fingers-
now I have made railway tracks
feel free to travel on those

"let me drink to the end of my perfect dream"

32 comments:

  1. This is a beautiful poem
    so nicely done!
    Pamela

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  2. Beautifully written! Great post!

    -Weasel

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  3. The feelings here, are so strong they are almost painful. You handle them with care, honor and respect them. That is a treasure. Thank you for sharing it,

    Elizabeth

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  4. Good that you can let someone go with no regrets.

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  5. The way of Nature... One has to find his/her nature and path.

    Nice, Gautami.

    Best regards.

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  6. great poem! particularly fond of the lines now I have made railway tracks
    feel free to travel on those


    peace,
    JP/deb

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  7. "now I have made railway tracks
    feel free to travel on those"

    Yes let him be a free bird. Yours if returns!

    feelings so beautifully put in words.

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  8. They've all said what I was going to say. Thankyou for this poem.

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  9. Just beautiful, starting with the title and to the perfect dream ending.

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  10. Letting go and being there--not easy! Beautiful. Thanks.

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  11. Very well said, Guatami..

    now I have made railway tracks
    feel free to travel on those

    Needs total awareness about self to be able to bestow such freedom..
    I always learn from your wisdom..

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  12. Gautami,

    Feelings on someone you treasure going away expressed so well in the opening words itself.

    Take care

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  13. Good travelling-poetry.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  14. A heartfelt melody of love so close, yet lost. And how to pave a path back to that love? You poem seems so real. I hope your love has returned.

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  15. This is great Gautami, I especially like the last verse. Well done!

    www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

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  16. Exquisite...love will never stay if it is held tightly...free it.

    railway tracks...Monday Poetry Train...? :)

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  17. yeah what they all sed... those last two lines just knock us over with understanding... this is a keeper!!

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  18. wow...and i am amazed when i say that...:-)

    beautiful metaphor I say so...

    thanks for your comment in my post and sure I will link one of my latest short story at Monday Poetry Train Revisited!

    have a nice day Gautami!

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  19. beautifully put Gautami, how I hate waking up from my beautiful dreams, sigh

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  20. Lovely writing . Have a beautiful style. Very nice poem

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  21. Your final line is so prayer like.... mmmm... I want to drink it all in...

    My "Overt" poem in this week's OSI -

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  22. This was such a visual poem for me, could see the broken axis, the stones, and love that slips through your fingers. Lovely work.

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  23. nicely done Gautami...thanks for this

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  24. This was beautiful - I think this is the one I like best from amongst all your poems. :)
    Thanks for sharing.

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  25. Wonderful poem, Tami. It so nicely tells the story of life and love and of the cycles of both.

    When I got to the railway tracks I was reminded of a little family of seven I saw last night playing down with the rails of the London Metro. They were rats, Mama, Papa, and five kids.

    And thank you for the nice prompt, Overt.

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  26. so well said,
    what beautiful images.


    my entry is up.

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  27. now I have made railway tracks
    feel free to travel on those


    That was just perfect.

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  28. beautiful and interesting poem well done:D Thank for sharing^^

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