Saturday 28 November 2009

dust motes in the heart

the cut in my gold bangle
reflects the sunlight
while I watch the dust motes
admiring their movements
the games they play
randomly settling

I wish to dislodge
that indescribable something
within my heart
displacing it with yours
those flying dust motes
make it easier for me to decide

"without losing any moment
I let myself migrate into you
and feel your life force in me"

38 comments:

  1. I would like to believe my life forces help your write this beautiful poetry but somehow I think you do it all by yourself.

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  2. I love the visual image that helps me to understand the poem emotionally...very well done.

    b

    http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2009/11/some-things-never-change.html

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  3. Liked the way the cuts in your gold bangle took you in a moment to feel the life force...nicely written Gautami.

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  4. An excellent journey into the writers' mind.

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  5. I enjoyed the inspiration you received to write this great poem.

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  6. Moments like you have described so beautifully are those that etch themselves into our memory.

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  7. Crafty, poetic, smart...better you than me hun ;)

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  8. That is beautiful, tender, and uplifting. You made my morning.

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  9. Wonderful! Your words were sharp and crystal clear, just like the sunlight against the gold bangle.

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  10. To make this strong connection with another is always a desire. I like the way you interplay with the dust mote and these images. I like this one.

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  11. Oh I loved how you ended this, a poem within itself ...

    "without losing any moment
    I let myself migrate into you
    and feel your life force in me"


    Beautiful!

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  12. Tami, ditto on the "how romantic!!"

    Now I will be looking for dust motes at play. I think my flashlight will work as did your bangle reflector.
    ..

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  13. dust motes playing games...I love it. Your visuals are so strong and powerful!

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  14. Wonderful use of the prompt word - the poem is tender and powerful, too!

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  15. You have poetic talent, for sure. Thanks for sharing your writing with the world.

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  16. Like a jay, the golden bangle caught my mind's eye.

    I love this idea.

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  17. Like a jay, the golden bangle caught my mind's eye.

    I love this idea.

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  18. it is hard to separate oneself from another... and that a scratch in a bangle could so exquisitely bring it pass is lovely...

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  19. I keep meaning to ask you - do you have a book out? Are you writing one? If not, you should be!

    Sassy Brit :))
    Alternative-Read.com
    *Giveaways*

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  20. Love the strong images in this poem. I could see the golden light and the dust motes dancing.

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  21. this made me catch my breath. I love it.

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  22. this is an interesting and unique piece. you make me want to get to know dust motes better. and I love that you don't loose a moment...

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  23. Julie Jordan Scott3 December 2009 at 08:12

    so sensual and romantic. "That indescribable something" made my heart heat up... like scooping some of itself out and offering it up, thinking...

    "this someone gets it..."

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  24. My first post was linkless. SO sorry to be posting again, but I couldn't figure out how to edit my first one. :-(

    Sorry.

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  25. I really like the meditative quality to this, how it examines the tiniest almost atomic trifles (dust motes) so calmly then turns with the same patience to integration with the "you."

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  26. I was floating in the particles of dust, taking in all the refreshing rays of light from your mind. Thank you!

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  27. Hi Gautami,

    Very simple words, gently expressed and full of meaning.

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  28. simply....a great journey.....thanks for sharing this Gautami

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  29. A beautiful Advent poem, Gautami, from whichever angle you come at it. Very nice!

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  30. I like the repeating image of the dust motes and the way they randomly settle.

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  31. Your expression and imagery are so honestly stated. I love that you included the sunshine and movements of dust. Thank you for adding delight to my day, Gautami.

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  32. As usual, you have such a way with poetry about relationships and love. Beautifully rendered.

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  33. Dust motes and pomegranate seeds as binding memories, quite original and interesting.

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  34. the cut in my bangle
    reflecting the light

    How effortlessly you dislodge emotional weight.

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  35. I am hypnotized by your flying dust motes. Wonderful.

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