Tuesday 24 February 2009

crossroads

when at crossroads
stop, pause a while,
fix the dilemma.
BY ASKING WHAT AILS YOU?
dilemma fixed now,
stop pausing
and cross the roads.

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Now go join the NaisaiKu Challenge.

Thanks Andy, I am lovin' writing those!

15 comments:

  1. Love the way you did this, it reminds me of:
    Summers coming
    and she's twenty eight bags
    of sugar overweight
    THE BEACH CAN'T WAIT
    Every day at the gym,
    bikini fits now
    she can swim

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  2. Hi Gautami, a quick fix, perhaps?

    Thanks for posting this...
    -Andy

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  3. lol..
    Lovely wordplay there..specially the splitology at the end..
    Good one!.

    Do try the newer form with the structure reduced to 5 lines..its really more fun..
    Thanks to andy again!

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  4. Loved it! There's something inferently playful about this form, I think.

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  5. Great advice in here, and another cool form. I admire your discipline in being able to tackle these forms!

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  6. Wonderful! I can see where these could get addictive...

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  7. I like this... we often face our own cross-roads.

    a moments paws
    to look both ways
    the cat crosses
    _m

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  8. WOW, you are mstering the concept here ... I'm sure you are going to write more of these and charm us!!

    Kudos ...

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  9. Ah a new way of doing it! I might try this too :D

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  10. Same words, different meaning - I like that.

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  11. i can tell you're having fun with these. and it shows!

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  12. Tami, that was a wonderful dhama buddy kind of poem. well done.

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