Sunday 17 February 2008

an ode for convoluted crevices


deep crevices
absorb sound, churning it for the brain

convoluted shells weigh reverberating words
lobes soft

bitingly so

pierced, decorated with love.

you deserve stars

I settle for second best-
I let you sparkle with diamonds
set in matt finished platinum.
my closest confidants
of my lover's naughty whispers,
I write this ode for you,
my much treasured ears.

Come ride the Poetry Train...

31 comments:

  1. wow very nice Gautami!

    keshi.

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  2. nice one
    i like this
    cheers for ears :)

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  3. Clapping! This is wonderfully fun Gautami! Thanks for starting my day off with a grin!

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  4. Wow!! I am all ears (& eyes) for more! The title again....ah!! :)And i see someone has seen sensuality too..Ahem! Ahem! (matte platinum finish 'over' the soft lobes, perhaps? what say? LOL! );) :)

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  5. (((((Gautami))))

    Thanks. :) I'd like someday to be able to meet you and we can talk our ears off. ;)

    I'll be flitting around this week.

    Rose

    xo

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  6. cheers for the ears indeed. loved the use of reverberating in this ode. thanks for the read :-)

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  7. 'my closest confidants
    of my lover's naughty whispers'

    LOVE that!

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  8. The ending is very simple and effective here. I like that "treasured" is both figurative and literal.

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  9. very interesting thought Gautami! love your poems

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  10. 'ear, 'ear - as they say.
    Excellent.

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  11. gautami, this is really wonderful. You make the ear even more beautiful than ever.

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  12. It is weird, that they don't wrinkle as much as the rest of the face... And they are responsable for so much good things!!

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  13. guatami,, this was so lovely... you know i never even thought about how much i do appreciate my sense of hearing... what a wonderful reminder.....

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  14. This reminded me of the ghost in Hamlet saying, "and poured the distillment in the porches of mine ears." Your poem truly honors ears!

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  15. enjoyed the ending...thhnx 4 bringin a simle on the face...
    nice topic u chose.. :)
    liked it

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  16. Oh, how very interesting.
    Then it would be. :)

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  17. ears never sound so alluring!

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  18. Your way of expression is extraordinary. Yet I've bookmarked you in the ordinary way... :-)

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  19. Very cleverly done! A reference on every line... I hear you!

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  20. I loved that it was so playful and yet also gave me goosebumps!

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  21. Oh so good all the way around. Of course you "did it right"! You "did it" wonderfully.

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  22. I adore the line "you deserve stars."

    This is a delightfully playful and sensual poem.

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  23. How beautiful! I guess I like my ears too, but I hadn't thought of them when I was trying to find a body part to write about.

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  24. I like this poem -especially how nicely it flowed. I liked how I could "taste" the lobe while reading.

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  25. You definitely did it right! Fantastic!

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