Sunday, 15 March 2009

lay in lace










nipped at waist
bodice laced-tight
LOST IN THAT MOMENT
both bodies lay together
fingers nipping into waist


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22 comments:

  1. sage15 March 2009 at 19:09

    Delicious poem

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  2. Julia Smith15 March 2009 at 19:24

    I'd say 'delicious', but Sage beat me to it.

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  3. J. Andrew Lockhart15 March 2009 at 21:31

    line 3 says it all....

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  4. venus6615 March 2009 at 23:32

    Certainly a good one, Gautami.

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  5. anthonynorth16 March 2009 at 01:54

    It's good to get lost in such moments - but old reality has a habit of eventually saying enough :-)

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  6. Linda Jacobs16 March 2009 at 06:15

    Very sensual! These few words paint quite the rich image!

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  7. Annamari16 March 2009 at 09:36

    I love the image...well done.

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  8. angie16 March 2009 at 13:29

    wonderful!

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  9. Tumblewords:16 March 2009 at 13:38

    Well paced lace!

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  10. littlekhargosh16 March 2009 at 19:12

    i'm sorry but imma use the word again: 'delicious!'

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  11. Fledgling Poet16 March 2009 at 19:29

    I'll say 'luscious'. :~)

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  12. OpenChannel16 March 2009 at 20:24

    I love the sound of "fingers nipping"

    (and if you say it fast it sound like "finger snipping"!)

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  13. Story Teller17 March 2009 at 16:21

    Hey, Nice One!!
    You write real well ... Hope to see you tomorrow at Tell a Tale, as it launches...
    Be the first one to post your entry and accumulate higher points!

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  14. songofsea17 March 2009 at 19:24

    Wow that was some write...sensuous!

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  15. AdellBeek17 March 2009 at 23:28

    I like how you created a nice moment with so few words.

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  16. Tina Trivett18 March 2009 at 03:53

    LOVE this...

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  17. TC18 March 2009 at 12:51

    I really liked this one a lot.

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  18. Sepiru Chris19 March 2009 at 21:48

    Hello Gautami.

    Lovely poem.

    To me, this conjures a Victorian ether party, before and after the bottle is opened.

    Or a coming out debutante's ball.

    Great work, Gautami.

    Tschuess,
    Chris

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  19. sudharm baxi19 March 2009 at 23:01

    hey

    Good play with words!!

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  20. Beloved Dreamer20 March 2009 at 12:35

    Very nice Tami but then you are a true poet. Lovely.


    love,Melanie-bd

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  21. !nversed Poignancy!21 March 2009 at 08:55

    Ah!, How romantic..really mushy and refreshing..
    Loved this!

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  22. SweetTalkingGuy21 March 2009 at 13:55

    Hi Gautami, Here I am, sorry I've been away, I could see your blog but my keyboard was swimming in coffee and would'nt let me post anything...

    That Moment seems like a nice place to be Lost in!!

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