Friday, 13 February 2009

NaisaiKuing: all the way


for basketting the ball
pull on your sports gear
get going ballistics
FOR BASKETTING THE BALL
get going ballistics
pull on your sports gear
for basketting the ball


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loosened elastics
pull down your pants
make you fall flat on ground
LOOSENED ELASTICS
make you fall flat on ground
pull down your pants
loosened elastics


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basket appears far away
the sky feels nearer
you see stars on ground
BASKET APPEARS FAR AWAY
you see stars on ground
the sky feels nearer
basket appears far away


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writing a naisaiKu
is it not mental sports
living out the brute force
WRITING A NAISAIKU
living out the brute force
is it not mental sports
writing a naisaiKu


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29 comments:

  1. Lorraine13 February 2009 at 07:16

    I am truly flabbergasted, how unusual and daring ;)

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  2. anthonynorth13 February 2009 at 07:58

    I see you've caught the bug. I must have a go.

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  3. Sweet Talking Guy..13 February 2009 at 08:36

    Hi Gautami, many thanks for rising to the challenge! Love the Loosened elastics!

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  4. Margie13 February 2009 at 09:02

    I'm so impressed with your writing ability!
    Good, good work!

    Margie

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  5. polona13 February 2009 at 09:32

    oh, this looks like fun!
    and you managed to make it into something special

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  6. texasblu13 February 2009 at 12:40

    that is a mental sport, for sure!

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  7. Whitesnake13 February 2009 at 12:46

    Bastards???
    Oh ya said Baskets....whoops!

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  8. Wendy Naisa13 February 2009 at 13:38

    Hi Gautami, love the way you took to this form so easily, I'm adding you to the Bloggage on the NaisaiKu.. site!

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  9. Linda Jacobs13 February 2009 at 13:40

    I'm going to have to check that site out. I think my kids would enjoy writing them.

    Love yours!

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  10. Haiku Tuna13 February 2009 at 14:12

    By coincidence I tried something new too.
    Trust

    I think you've now inspired two of us to have a go as well, with your style -- always thoughtful!

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  11. venus6613 February 2009 at 14:22

    Very impressive!

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  12. david santos13 February 2009 at 15:32

    Fantastic!
    Excellent work!!! Congrats.

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  13. latree13 February 2009 at 20:21

    it is like a mirror work. wonderful!

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  14. Jeeves13 February 2009 at 20:25

    Wow!!!I love the third one!!!!

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  15. firebird13 February 2009 at 21:33

    You are so clever! I love the way the four poems interact in a series...
    I am always impressed with how you take on new challenges and forms of poetry that require a great deal of discipline.. is that your mathematical training? (Plus inspiration, of course!)

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  16. J. Andrew Lockhart13 February 2009 at 21:49

    interesting way of writing...

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  17. goldensparks14 February 2009 at 00:32

    Hi friend.. Interesting and informative post.. Keep up the good work.. I will be visiting your blog often.. Do visit my blog and post your comments.. Thank you.. Take care mate.. Cheers!!!

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  18. Ofira Sephiroth14 February 2009 at 05:20

    great series of poems with an interesting subject.

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  19. Rex Venom14 February 2009 at 10:23

    I love what you post. The last one, too! Where does it all come from...?
    Are you secretly a creative mad woman?
    Rock on!

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  20. haikuexpeditions14 February 2009 at 11:00

    nice indeed. keep it going...

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  21. Pretty Me!!14 February 2009 at 11:56

    loved all of them here !!!!

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  22. Tumblewords:14 February 2009 at 13:39

    Ah, you did well! I haven't tried this yet...

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  23. b14 February 2009 at 13:44

    I wish I even understood how you do this. Fun to read I think.

    b

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  24. Stan Ski14 February 2009 at 14:44

    Now it's a sport too! We should have a competition.

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  25. present14 February 2009 at 17:24

    This is very interesting! It looks challenging and fun!

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  26. keith15 February 2009 at 14:15

    This form of writing seems to be getting very popular and yours is a good as it gets! Loved it.

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  27. rosey15 February 2009 at 14:18

    Woo! This is fun. Can you imagine me writing NasalKings? I'm sure I'd get in a terrible muddle.

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  28. Cam15 February 2009 at 19:29

    Very funny. It's very good.

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  29. floreta16 February 2009 at 06:53

    these are fun. it is probably harder than it looks. mental sport indeed!

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