fl
..ut
......te
.........ri
...........ng
leaves
of
my
journal
wh
.....is
........per
softly
to each other
t
h
e
sec
......rets i poured
i
n
t
o
them.
st
...ai
......ns of my sweat
&
s
..m
.....u
.......d
.........g
...........e
.............s
of my tears
unquestionably underline
my faith in
.....................po
....................... wer
of words
when I touch a tiny hair of
eyelash in between the pages,
I marvel at the symmetry
"isn't
..........nature
....................... in
.............................itself
.......................................a
miracle of
....................cr
.......................ea
...........................ti
.............................on?"
That's beautiful! I love the way it looks like fluttering pages, too!
ReplyDeleteLezlie
The format looks nice, innovative...
ReplyDeleteWish you a Merry Christmas, Gautami
devika
Brilliant. Absolute delight!!Merry Christmas
ReplyDeleteI really like the shape of this poem; the perfect mirror of the verbal image. I have read it three times and enjoyed it more each time.
ReplyDeleteI love "stains of my sweat"! The whole thing is so effective! This id definitely one of your best!
ReplyDeleteLovely, another new style for you, Gautami
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! Merry, merry Christmas!
ReplyDeleteyear's end . . .
ReplyDeletesorting through a batch
of new memories
Happy new year, dear Gautami.
Beautiful was the one word that came to my mind as I read this, too.
ReplyDeleteThere is symmetry all around. Reminders.
Merry Christmas!
lovely !! perfect visual poetry .. its my desire to try it myself some day soon !!
ReplyDeleteI like the contrast of the visual syncopation against the title of the poem. And the interruption the eyelash creates in the thought. Very nice and different.
ReplyDeletebeautifully done........merry christmas......Gautami.....
ReplyDeleteCool, G.
ReplyDeleteI especially like the way "whisper" is stretched out. It made me hear the pages against each other. Just right.
ReplyDeletehaving fun, hey? :)
ReplyDeleteCool!
and yes, there's no better artist than mother nature. there's a masterpiece on every leaf, every seashell, any canvas in the sky...
Nice pattern poem, and evokes e.e.'s spirit to boot!
ReplyDeleteI love this kind of stuff.
Hello my fabulous friend from afar.
ReplyDeleteI have missed you too...still amazing and creative as always.
Thank You for your warm winter greeting. Hopefully you felt my wonderment and awe at how marvelous this creation is..regardless of how one imagines that it came into existance.
It is a miracle.
Excellently done. And visually effective.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the visit!
ReplyDeleteI love the way the format of your poem lets the reader "hear" the words...you can "hear" the pages of the journal whispering against each other.
Nice to meet you!
~Angie
how beautiful a creative blend of enlightenment ..carrying one along as a soft wind whispering... reminds me of eecummings in a way, sorta...
ReplyDeleteThis is a veritable feast for the eyes, ears and touch.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment.
b
Beautiful and very interesting format, which adds so much to the charm of the piece. Thanks for sharing with us.
ReplyDeleteIt was certainly interesting!
ReplyDeleteI particularly enjoyed this one because of the picture you painted in format and in choice of words.
ReplyDeleteYou must have had a wonderful time creating this construct of sense and place -- on the page! It's always a pleasure to visit and read here.
ReplyDeleteHappy new year!
I love not only your words, but now this is constructed. Very visual. I could see you writing, your pages fluttering, your smudges and tears.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
interesting visuals here
ReplyDeletewords so smooth like velvet! i can hear them out loud and they sound nice..
ReplyDeletevery cool--yes the way it is formatted makes it seem very much like fluttering pages! congrats on the wonderful way you organized the thoughts, the words, the letters!
ReplyDeleteA belated Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
ReplyDeleteYour shape poem is well done and very touching.
Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteGlad the some of my poem layouts have been an inspiration.