within the ruined castle
behind the colossal pillars
silhouettes on the walls
come alive in the middle
of a dark moonless night
misted glass twist to a timeless
dance of whorling thoughts
making one feel palpable
time lurks in its confines,
standing to a sudden stillness
seeing an apparition coming
out of the opposite wall, I scream
resonance of which tears my ears
icy wind blows out of nowhere
numbing the senses senseless
scared I turn and run, slipping over
I fall into a deep bottomless crypt,
where snakes make a grand feast of me
all that remains are my bones, my soul
having merged with ghosts of past era
This is scary!!!
ReplyDeleteI think many are running scared right now, or plunging themselves into the depths.
ReplyDeleteA good sense of the gothic in this. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteits very dark being scared creates its own depths of darkness!
ReplyDeleteThis id too scary!
ReplyDeleteIt's like a nightmare I had once...
Well done!
"...misted glass twist to a timeless dance of whorling thoughts."
ReplyDeleteWow - I can read so many different things in this one line! Great job!
I love how much attention you paid to sounds in your poem. I really hope this isn't some sort of gloomy interpretation of our election process!
ReplyDeletedark and rhythmic...love the sounds and imagery...!
ReplyDeleteit becomes more and more physical then ethereal!
ReplyDeletei can hear this one ringing in my head...
well, at least you won't be alone
ReplyDeletehe he
Great offering for this weeks write. I love the chills I got.
ReplyDeletei hate to dream this dream..very scary !!!!
ReplyDeleteGautami --
ReplyDeleteVery, very creepy, and the snakes were so crawly... I hate snakes!
A ghoulish and grand tale! ;)
...rob
"where snakes make a grand feast of me"
ReplyDeleteGee giving snakes a bad name!
brilliant work!
very appropriate for the Halloween season!
ReplyDeletedance of whorling thoughts
ReplyDeletebrilliant
Very gothic. I like the "whorling thoughts."
ReplyDeleteIt's like a dream, and yet, as a Jewish mystical teacher Rabi Nahman once said: made into a story, a dream is no longer just a dream...
ReplyDeleteThe drama keeps coming in this one! There is almost a breathless sense of horror! Part of the fear is that the nightmare is way out of control! Enjoyed this!
ReplyDeleteWOW!!! I may not sleep now! :)
ReplyDeleteA superlative piece, as usual. Love the vivid, dark imagery. Very well-penned!
ReplyDeletevisiting your blog for the first time.
ReplyDeletevery interesting. a haunting image, well worked out.
have bookmarked you.
dark and scary... but a good one!
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