Monday 31 October 2011

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I am caught between the gutter and sidewalk
my heart thumps 
when I see the flickering sunset
my foot hits a bottle
I look down at my bloody toe
which has now carved into a stone
my legs have vanished
my shadow is crooked
and my innards gurgle out
I try to figure out why your body twitched 
when I am the one who is hurt

"I wake to find myself typing away furiously,
my words falling all over-
operation writing accomplished"

31 comments:

  1. The words tumbled out well and you completed the operation too!! ;)

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  2. You are developing such awesome imagery in your writing. In reading this particular piece I can remember so many years ago just that feeling of hurt. Love the culprit again of course!

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  3. as tumblewords said it, very profound indeed

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  4. This is an explosion of creativity!!!

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  5. Very gruesome, vivid and .... yucky! LOL

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  6. Your creative juices really flowed! Great Magpie.

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  8. What a sharp, well written piece..deeply felt..

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  9. Wonderful writing...I really enjoyed the story you weave in this poem.

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  10. Tumbling words are better than ones which remain stuck. ♥

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  11. Well-written...liked it. // Peter.

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  12. really like that question of why they were the one that twitched...and as always your last line pulls us in whole other directions...

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  13. Dear Gautaumi: Sounds like a case of writer-warrior syndrome! Need another case of beer here! Excellent tale told (unfortunately totalled the dear writer!). Blood letting sounds much easier than "twitching". (nerves still alive and full function!)

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  14. I like the image this evokes, Gautami.

    Pamela

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  15. Clever! The writing is accomplished, but at what price. Your conclusions always enhance the poem. I admire that.

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  16. seamless connection... dynamite writing!!!

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  17. Nice take on the wordle and on the "operation" prompt (hope you were doing them both!). This is visceral and heartfelt at once. I really got into the "love connection." Good writing, my dear! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/11/01/skin-like-a-cloak/

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  18. reminds me of a samuel beckett poem,
    desolation with strong clarity.

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  19. Your words found their way to the surface and they were very good. What descriptive lines.

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