Sunday 14 August 2011

hinder the tremors

one day when ocean becomes nether
I pledge to tread on it
I will let the tremors enter into me
as I want to feel the sacred sea
it will get enmeshed into darkness
no plaster separates it from that tuft
if the fish hinder its sporadic ventures

if it is possible, 
I will remove the stigma of the sea
it too has a right to move forward
I can listen to its whisper
even when it laughs out loud
I don't need an eye for an eye
the world is already blind.

"the deep can never go away, it only enhances"


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44 comments:

  1. Complex yet beautiful in its complexity. A voyage of self discovery. Lovely use of the wordle words.

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  2. Gautami, I am so glad that you have joined us at The Sunday Whirl. Your final stanza is astounding; it resonates a sad truth.
    ~Brenda

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  3. oh ... this leaves me shaking ... such sad truth, no matter how badly we want it to change

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  4. I love your final stanza, it is really wonderful! You used the wordle words to good effect here.

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  5. Such a lovely poem you wrote, great centus for laugh out loud! Thanks!

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  6. Been a while, my friend. Glad to see you here and doing what you alone can do, and with the wordle words, no less. The ocean has a call like no other, and your poem reminds all of us of that reality,

    Elizabeth

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  7. A remarkable piece. Thanks for your coninued support of Carry On Tuesday - this weeks prompt, 'an eye for an eye' was the perfect finish to a perfect poem!

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  8. Ahh yes another wave of futility.

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  9. Wow - this one took a few readings to sink in, and I like that. Powerful and beautiful.

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  10. This is in no way futile, dark or sad. For me it is a positive reinforcement. However, poetry is interpreted in the reader's mind. He/she perceives what he/she wants to. It depends on the mood of the reader...

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  11. Nice way of discussing the yearning to learn about the depth and secrets of the sea :)
    enjoy the potluck!!!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/13/words-not-spoken/

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  12. The last stanza is awesome, Gautami. Nice to see you over at the wordle site.

    Pamela

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  13. The sea has the right to move forward, and we have the right to oppose it, though opposition is futile.

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  14. I love poetry about the sea and of giving it feelings like ourselves. For me it laughs out loud often, luckily I can see and hear it, as you can too.

    You beautiful poetry emphasizes the complexity of our lives and all its influences.

    Thank you for your visit.

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  15. I enjoyed this greatly. Such a gentle poem with a profound message!

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  16. Sometimes it is necessary to endure the tremors..to find a control of the sea..captivating words..Jae

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  17. A great poem.
    I particularly liked those last two lines,
    'I don't need an eye for an eye
    the world is already blind' - how very true.
    Thanks for a great read

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  18. A lilting, moving piece told using one of my favorite things, the ocean in a very symbolic way...I love it !!!

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  19. Mind blowing !! You did this so easily!!....and incorporated so many prompts to good effect too!!

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  20. I really like the last stanza. ~Ames

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  21. Beautiful flowing poem of the flowing sea, much wisdom, and it feels peaceful.

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  22. You know Gautami, coming here and commenting to appreciate your poetry is akin to appreciating the beauty of someone hugely blessed with it everyday... I mean your creations always leave me wondering... a very unique style this.. and you encourage me to keep on adding new words to my thoughts.. keep weaving magic.. thanks!!!

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  23. To understand the sea - a journey of a lifetime. Your poem captures that desire well, and the quote and photos at the end work well with it. Reminded me of a quote from the Bible: "Deep calls to deep in the roar of your waterfalls; all your waves and breakers have swept over me." (Psalm 42:7)

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  24. Guatami, I couldn't help but think of tsunamis and monsoons when I read your poem. Beautiful image. Thank you.

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  25. Beautiful! The last line is so thought-provoking. laurie

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  26. Stunning poetry. Gorgeously written!

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  27. Very moving, indeed.

    Namaste..........cj

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  28. Excellent .... WOW ...!!!
    Isadora

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  29. Lovely work, Gautami, and your paraphrase of Gandhi at the end makes it all the more poignant. Great take on the Wordle! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/forward-march-special-ops/

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  30. A thought-provoking last line.

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  31. The opening line is amazing, outdone only by the closing two lines.

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  32. Final lines are fabulous. Great way to use the quote.

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  33. Deep, abiding poetry...you are blessed with a gift...Peace...Namaste

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  34. Great use of the prompt!! Well done!

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  35. Excellent poem, especially the last stanza.

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  36. Beautiful finish to this one. Very nice!

    My second offering for this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/i-am-loved/

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  37. "The world is already blind" indeed. Powerful something here makes me pensive again. :D

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  38. I loved the line about the world being blind. This is so lovely and complex. Your imagery, as always, is brilliantly wonderful.

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